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My dear darkness
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My dear darkness |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
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This is what happens when I spend an evening listening to nothing but gothic music with a pounding headache. Anyway.......... My dear darkness And the mirror fell earthward, its silver face traced the sun down. It smashed into the sea, drowned itself among that light. No one ever found it whole; but pieces came to shore to die. They reflected the gray of the sky eaten away by salt and sand. The sun would still play with its kill, pressing its face from piece to piece, a silent song for the death of light among its own creation. The frame was never found. It grew as large as the floor of the sea. A pane of moving, dark water to drown and pound ahead to dreams. My dear darkness, that reflection is amiss. My dear darkness, you are a snowy kiss. My dear darkness, send your song across the shore. My dear darkness. Give me it. Give me more. And the mirror fell skyward. It crushed apart and made our stars. And I prayed to its disintegrated face to trace me silver where you are. I became the sun. Oh, I watched you die. But you see, the sun can burn but he cannot cry. My dear darkness, send your taste to me. My dear darkness, bring the moon to comfort me. My dear darkness, I can't set the world alight. My dear darkness make me clouds among your night. We wished on clouds. We wished on stars. We drowned the sea. We drowned afar. And the mirror fell backward. And the moon took my place. And I lie hear on the beach where I still search for your face. My dear darkness, oh take me down. My dear darkness, dig me deep into your ground. My dear darkness, so I may touch your heart. My dear darkness. We must never part. She said burn ... together. |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
... Wow. I'm speechless, baby... *kiss* Wow. I think I need t' load you down with s'more goth albums, in hopes of something like this happening again, huh?  Elements of Steinman and early Cure. Like Pornography and Top Cure. In fact, the words "give me it" have now put that exact song in my head. Prolly irepairably... I love you. You always amaze me. written in blood before everything went black |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
 backWell, lessee, Faith and the Muse inspired "Siren song" and "The rain over the sea." The Cure inspired a bunch of poems, among them "Dead car," "Dark girl in violet, "As far away as that," "The ache of falling apart," etc. Sisters of Mercy inspired "Pandorean ocean." Bauhaus inspired the ridiculously cute "Black evening" and the sorta cool "Cinnamon fields." Siouxsie and Type O Negative infuses a lot of the thinking in my Adult poems, not to mention TON is my signature! So yes, that music has a way with me. She said burn ... together. -TON Get readin'! Siren song: /pip/Forum69/HTML/001870.html The rain over the sea: /pip/Forum69/HTML/002387.html As far away as that: /pip/Forum69/HTML/001177.html The ache of falling apart: /pip/Forum69/HTML/000887.html Cinnamon fields: /pip/Forum69/HTML/002032.html And if you want to see a young me -- only a few months after joining PIP, actually -- /pip/Forum31/HTML/002049.html I was such an opinionated brat then. Read th' poem if y' want, but my replies are soooo embarrassing. Of course, if you actually just went and read all those, you need to get out more. And there's plenty more where that came from, if y' want. (by the way, th' are for Lori -- the rest of th' message is for her an' everybody here)[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (07-21-2002 06:32 PM).] |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Wow, Mikey... This is amazing!! bravo! ~Tier "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks for enjoyin' my strange mind, Tier.She said burn ... together. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Aw, my poor poem sank from sight. Mr. Desperation She said burn ... together. |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
*kiss* Let's unsink this sucker. My erotigoth baby. I'm off to play with Barbie! [warning! warning! inside joke detected!]written in blood before everything went black |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Well, tomorrow morning, I'm gonna spend two hours with Barbi. My friend, not th' doll! She said burn ... together. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Very kwel sometimes songs inspire me 2 If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Your intensity is growing fast!!! I love this one, Mike!! A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And the mirror fell earthward, its silver face traced the sun down. It smashed into the sea, drowned itself among that light. No one ever found it whole; but pieces came to shore to die. They reflected the gray of the sky eaten away by salt and sand. The sun would still play with its kill, pressing its face from piece to piece, a silent song for the death of light among its own creation. ================================== And the mirror fell skyward. It crushed apart and made our stars. And I prayed to its disintegrated face to trace me silver where you are. I became the sun. Oh, I watched you die. But you see, the sun can burn but he cannot cry. =========================== OH MY GOD --- I LOVE YOUR MIND!!!! Do you know how damn cool your imagery and personification is!!!??!! You just blow me away sometimes..I read your poetry and just shake me mothy head and yell at the screen..HES SO COOL!!!!! and I had to smile at your replies on this... about how you used to reply...do ya remember when ya asked me "not to worship" your poetry...that it made you feel like you wouldnt be able to live up to it the next time you wrote? I TOLD ya youd get used to me LOL and? I TOLD you I had the utmost faith in your ability to relight the sky each time youd pick up your pen.... and now--its what? 2 years later, and your still proving me right... YEAH...I got me poetic knee pads on... they match me butterfly slippers  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
MD and Kris, danke. Butterfly Slippers, thank you so much for yr words. And "relight the sky" needs to be a poem! She said burn ... together. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Your personification here sets me to *shame*  and? I'm kinda jealous if THIS is what a headache give YOU...~sigh~ (off to bounce my head against the wall in hopes of some of this!!) Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Syneq Junior Member
since 2002-07-28
Posts 40 |
This is hands down the best poem I have read in a very long time. The imagery is astounding. I wish I knew where your mind and heart were at the moment you wrote this. It is immense beauty. Syneq Disintegrated to materialize in reformed delight. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
D --  ... Ah, a poem!S -- Thank you so, so much.  And my mind was and is at the place where I long to be back with Lori, who lives in Calgary, while I still live in California.She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (07-28-2002 08:30 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike Amazing..and what JM said. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, Martie.She said burn ... together. |
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LSM Junior Member
since 2002-07-28
Posts 11Oregon |
bsquirrel, Deep, incredible read! Enjoyed it much. LSM |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Much appreciated, LSM. MPC Said if I only could ... |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
This is fantabulous! I think I'll go wish for a pounding headache and go out and but soem gothic music LOL |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Good luck, SG.Said if I only could ... |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
The darker and moodier the goth, the better it is for inspiration. No, I don't listen much, not at all. The loneliest words you'll ever know: |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
*kuess* Said if I only could ... |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
*kuess zueruck* Wish I knew how to make umlauds. The loneliest words you'll ever know: |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I almost said something perverse in response. Bad me!Said if I only could ... |
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