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EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA

0 posted 2002-07-21 01:42 AM



grant me this fortress
from small tries at
capitalizing on external beauty

it works!
for a while
but after the picture
is no longer in motion for me
and the glories of the paycheck
have expent

the fortress proves temporary
because then you show me
that without the fame and glory
and drug parties and such
your pedestal of honesty
demands a longevity my fortress
cannot sustain.

you fell for me
for my pictures on a tube
you sensed my eyes showed truth
you persevered
in all attempts to gain someone
"out of reach"

never realizing that the
reach was only out for me
you can never believe you
able to have such a public love

and yet i can see the love
without the public's stay
for this icon you've chosen
is easier obtained
than the icon's icon believing
he's less

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devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
1 posted 2002-07-21 11:01 AM


Michael?? this is good time spent dwelling in your read!!

~and the glories of the paycheck
have expent~


yep...

definantly enjoy the dwell and honesty of you...

take care sweetie!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
2 posted 2002-07-21 01:30 PM


"you can never believe you
able to have such a public love

and yet i can see the love
without the public's stay"

Understood. As difficult as it is for these words to be truth in your line (for others), I do believe you truthful. A nice poem of honesty. Thanks.

MidnightSon
Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312
between the gutter & the stars
3 posted 2002-07-22 04:50 PM


i just plain love this one.
excellent, excellent write.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

Tiersdin
Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
4 posted 2002-07-22 08:03 PM


This needs to be bumped back up for everyone to get a chance to read.

excellent!
~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

wranx
Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
5 posted 2002-07-22 08:12 PM


Thanks to Tier for bumping this
Missed it first go-round

"the fortress proves temporary
because then you show me
that without the fame and glory
and drug parties and such
your pedestal of honesty
demands a longevity my fortress
cannot sustain."

This speaketh to me

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.      

Bukowski

News_From_Nowhere
Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
CU, NY
6 posted 2002-07-23 03:23 AM


Wow! Usually it's the one in love with the public icon that gives the unattainable message, but here you, whom I've figured out to be a movie "icon", show that the fame does not taint the truth of compassion. This was simply beautiful, and all should read. Hope this works out, truly!!! Thanks for the poem, Eve!

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

News_From_Nowhere
Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
CU, NY
7 posted 2002-07-23 03:24 AM


Sorry, this computer tried to post this twice.

[This message has been edited by News_From_Nowhere (07-23-2002 03:27 AM).]

leah1318
New Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 4

8 posted 2002-07-23 09:28 AM


i liked your poam it was really good
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