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Sven
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0 posted 2002-07-18 04:50 PM


here,
      take back this sword
        I've used it long enough

the battles have been long and hard
       and though I never killed
                    I did hurt
but,
     I was driven (if driven is a word)
                             by myself
                               my other self
                     full of anger
                           not what I was meant to be
but, what I became

now,
     the time has come to release this
                   to let go
to strike the sword
                 into the stone

never
      to be
             released again

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

© Copyright 2002 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
devina
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Cali
1 posted 2002-07-18 07:17 PM


So...uh...John???

bringin your sword in here fer some dark play huh??? (evil me...yes...but you tempt)



now that I've pounced for missin ya...

this? OH YES!!! you know JUST how to word it sweets...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



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2 posted 2002-07-19 12:44 PM


definetely time to get rid of that sword, Sweet Man.

Lets hope there isn't anyone who can pull it back out either.

Good to see you in dark, but you once told me something like this..

Visit the dark once in a while, but don't let it take you completely. Hope that was close.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

Sven
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3 posted 2002-07-19 04:57 PM


um, Tanya??  me tempt??  
hardly my dear. . . but, I feel I need
to be here for a while. . . so, you don't mind do you???  I didn't think so. . .

Temptress, yes. . . it is time to get rid of it. . . it's pretty heavy to carry. . . and yes, time for me to visit the Darkness again. . . for a moment. . . thanks. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Secret Whisper
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4 posted 2002-07-24 04:40 PM


Intriguing piece. I like the reference to the Sword in the Stone, clever analogy. Kudos.

"I am not alive enough to kill myself." - Mary Ipal

wranx
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5 posted 2002-07-24 09:01 PM


Sven,
This would be the place for a little excorcism. Hope you don't mind the rest of us watching.
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Oh! how's your Joycian thingamajig comin'?

Don't hurt your head too much with it.
Have fun!

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.      

Bukowski

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6 posted 2002-07-25 01:11 AM


second thought..maybe you should get that sword back out? Or..can I? I can think of a little hunting I'm hungry for these days.

Still like this.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

Sven
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7 posted 2002-07-25 04:47 PM


Secret Whisper, thank you. . . just a way for me to finally put it away for good. . .

wranx, no, I don't mind you watching at all. . .but, it might get a little ugly. . .and the Joyce-inspired thing is coming. . . too bad it doesn't flow like his river did. . .

Temptress, no, I think that it should stay where it is. . . better to keep it than to let it loose again. . . thanks for the words. . .

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EveGnosis
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8 posted 2002-08-14 01:19 AM


how did i miss this beautiful work? yes, take back this sword, and yes, although i never killed, i hurt...

(assuming fetal position, and sucking thumb)

great poem!

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

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9 posted 2002-08-14 10:53 AM


I dont know Sven sounds like a camlot story to me, watch no comes along to realease it
Still a interesting wrtie

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

Sven
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10 posted 2002-08-18 10:53 PM


Eve Gnosis. . . yes, I know the feeling. . . I too, have hurt. . . which is why I'm giving it back. . . thanks. . .

Moon Dust. . .not as Camelot as I'd like it to be I'm afraid. . . thanks. . .

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