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LADY_DEATH
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since 2002-11-29
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0 posted 2002-12-27 04:25 PM


               Apocalyptic Fate


Bloodshed, Bloodshed
is what it will be
Once your head
belongs to me


Temper, Temper
temper of mine
i punctured your eye sockets
now you're blind
the missing pieces of your brain
caused by the metal blade

All this torture
But you're still alive
i won't let you die
And take the easy way out

Experiencing the excitement
of torturing those i hate
Flashing vivid images
Of their apocalyptic fate

I'm getting bored
time to end the game
Into the incenerator
i want to watch you burn!


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Stinky Twinkie
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since 2002-11-26
Posts 204
Dinwiddie
1 posted 2002-12-28 01:45 AM


Awesome, this sounds like a death metal song...which is a good thing.  Very good imagery thrown in there.

-Stinky Twinkie-

fractal007
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

2 posted 2002-12-29 04:13 AM


A dark and frank poem on the part of the speaker.  Somewhat remeniscent of Nazi actions during the holocaust.  You have done a good job portraying evil as we have seen it in recent years.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

Long Island Slim
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since 2002-12-12
Posts 4

3 posted 2002-12-30 12:53 PM


i particularly like the line.."temper temper, temper of mine.."..very musical.
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