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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-07-14 04:33 PM



Guess what? This isn't Dark at all! And guess what else? I'm moderatin'.

I found my love within her room
I found my love within her room.
All her art upon her walls.
Masks and faces peering out
from coats of paints and pastels.

I found my love within her room
searching from a mirror's eye.
Fan was blowing paper there
and catching pieces in her hair.

I found my love within her room.
She sang so softly from the floor.
I gave her ice cream kisses' melt
and forgot to lock the door.

I found my love within her room.
She lay upon her bed and cried.
I held her close and whispered things
as the rain met words outside.

I found my love within her room.
The music grew within her mind.
She wrote it out in every touch.
whether feeling cruel or kind.

I found my love within her room.
Someday, perhaps, room of two?
Waking up with you each day.
Every morning view anew.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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brian sites
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1 posted 2002-07-14 05:35 PM


guess what squirrelerator?
hope you find the room for two
not really dark
but a little blue
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

GoddessofHell
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2 posted 2002-07-14 07:50 PM


I love this....very beautiful.

Enjoyed much.

Heather

wranx
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3 posted 2002-07-14 08:55 PM


Lovely, squirrel dude. Well, not you, the poem.
I tried to high a stanza, but they are so dependent on one another, I thought if I lifted one of them the rest would go tumblin' down.

I guess the only bad thing would be, that I had to imagine a spider lurkin' about.

~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do...provided it's done in private and you wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

wranx
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4 posted 2002-07-14 08:57 PM


Before I suffer any "acid cracks", that would be "HIGHLIGHT".

Me Moron

~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do...provided it's done in private and you wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

bsquirrel
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5 posted 2002-07-14 10:32 PM


I know what y' meant, wranx. Do you know you can edit yr own stuff up to 24 hours after it was originally written? Just click the pen and paper (or whatever that is) icon, and yr on yr way!

I'm glad you enjoyed my poem, wranx.

And thanks, Heather and brian!

Mikey

She said burn ... together.
-TON

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (07-14-2002 10:34 PM).]

Anvrill
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6 posted 2002-07-14 10:48 PM


Yay!

Though my door has no lock, so there was never any problem with that anyway. Love you so much. I is beaming!

Love you. And even the manically smiling Nny on my wall seems happy now.

written in blood before everything went black

JCV

bsquirrel
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7 posted 2002-07-14 10:51 PM


Hey, remember that poem I wrote with Tiersdin where your eyes were blue and not green? Poetic license! (read: lazy)

Hence, th' door.

I love you too.

Mikhail

She said burn ... together.
-TON

idrift2u
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8 posted 2002-07-14 11:03 PM


Hey,
   You know, this poem, to me, in my opinion, seems a little "squishy".
BUT!, there was a line that I really liked, seriously,...:

"as the rain met words outside"

That, was good...

I luhk it aluht

Thanks  

Anvrill
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9 posted 2002-07-14 11:10 PM


Oh, and the fan had betrayal's legs stuffed through the cage. I certainly hope it was, at no point, turned on. Poor betrayal already has his heart ripped out and a knife planted (though not so firmly; it keeps falling out) in his back! I wouldn't want him to have mangled legs too.

Ah, the joy of SLG toys. And would it be wrong of me to hang him (yes, actually hang him) in th' Alchemy corner? 'Cause I gotta get him off my desk; he's in my way. And it's so hot that I gotta actually use the fan now.

Still love you, squirrely baby. Yr poetry rocks my world.

written in blood before everything went black

JCV

idrift2u
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10 posted 2002-07-14 11:41 PM


Dogs don't know its not BACON
bsquirrel
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11 posted 2002-07-14 11:48 PM


Sure, my twisted grrl.

And id2u: shhhh! Th' secret password!

Signed,
Huh? Wha'?

She said burn ... together.
-TON

devina
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12 posted 2002-07-16 10:22 PM


So I'm diggin for your not so dark stuff...

and? I sense some cuteness here (once again) you two really need a good squishing ceremony...stop by anytime!!

loved this Mikey...and the moderation of you again? almost tempted to dance for ya'll!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



bsquirrel
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13 posted 2002-07-16 11:08 PM


Ow, I've been squished to death!

Thanks, detanya.

Private Joke Lord

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Anvrill
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14 posted 2002-07-16 11:28 PM


Hey, no squishing my boytoy to death! That's my job.

written in blood before everything went black

JCV

bsquirrel
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15 posted 2002-07-17 12:23 PM


*squish**squish*

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Anvrill
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16 posted 2002-07-17 02:14 PM


*giggle* I can just picture some Jhoneny black-n-white inked image to go with those li'l sound effects. *kiss* I really am terrible today.

And I'm rediscovering Pat Benatar! Early '80s pop rock grrl! Grr. Only because I found out she covered Kate Bush's Wuthering Heights, and I remembered Dad had some albums, so I rushed downstairs. But nooo, none o' 'em have it. *pout* Oh well. She be rockin'. If I had remembered she existed, Kim would idolize her.

written in blood before everything went black

JCV

devina
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17 posted 2002-07-17 02:37 PM


I was thinking of squishin both of you's for being so cute round here...

Lori? no?

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



bsquirrel
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18 posted 2002-07-17 02:37 PM


Oh, and get this baby! Kate Bush wrote and recorded that song WHEN SHE WAS 17 YEARS OLD.

And now I have Love is a Battlefield in my head. Noooooooooo!

Love y'.

Mikey

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Anvrill
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19 posted 2002-07-17 02:51 PM


Whoah, squishings abound! Do I run now, or later?

And Mikhail, now you're obligated to record/play/something that song for me.

Also, there is absolutely nothing wrong with Love is a Battlefield! Though Hell is for Children is what is now stuck in my head.

Hmm....

We are cute, aren't we?

written in blood before everything went black

JCV

bsquirrel
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20 posted 2002-07-17 04:19 PM


Yep!

The Needless Poster (NOT the Needles Poster!)

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Tiersdin
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21 posted 2002-07-18 10:45 PM


I like this Mikey... I've missed reading your work...

always a pleasure!
~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

bsquirrel
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22 posted 2002-07-18 10:49 PM


Thanks, Mr. Tier!

Ms. Chmielecki

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Anvrill
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23 posted 2002-07-18 11:00 PM


Mikhail, baby, you confuse me. I'd notice if you were a Ms.

written in blood before everything went black

JCV

bsquirrel
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24 posted 2002-07-18 11:35 PM


Sorry, baby. I'm just having fun with poor, gentle Wranx. Sorry, wranx! I'll be good.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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25 posted 2002-07-19 03:31 AM


thoroughly enjoyed, squirrel.
not dark, but cloudy and bittersweet.
the words meeting the rain is a great image! love that stanza.

congrats on joining the Mod Squad.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

bsquirrel
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26 posted 2002-07-19 12:58 PM


Thanks, ms.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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