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brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2002-07-13 03:14 AM

crackling sneer
scarbright
on tanned
veneer
plagued by alone
standing crone
among her ancient eden

           They sidewalked on their way
           sidelong glances was her pay
           haunted through her painted gaze
           she branded each with numbered days

no gossip would reveal
that every I had seen the same
but subconscious listened
          heard her lips glisten
              whispering every name

For they had all
sub-urbaned
on her
disturbed remains
and she was
beyond subtle
       ghostly
       pleasures

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

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idrift2u
Member

since 2002-07-09

Posts 60
MD., USA

1 posted 2002-07-13 07:29 AM

Sounds good,
Nice read...

"that every I had seen the same"

An I for an eye?
...I like...

...no really...
I'm cerel....
Thanks
hugs

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

2 posted 2002-07-13 08:25 AM

For BS;

Hmmm... Smack, Sample, Slurplick.
Does one detect detest detaste of a breakfast once "Waked"??

For others;

Nice!

~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do...provided it's done in private and you wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

GoddessofHell
Member

since 2002-07-09

Posts 76

3 posted 2002-07-13 03:30 PM

WOW Brian ....I just LOVE it.
This is absolutely great...grrrr wish I had wrote this one.

Enjoyed much!
Heather

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-07-13 08:48 PM

I like what you do with words, BS.

The other bs

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2005-08-23 12:45 PM

These suckers grow up everywhere and they all look the same! Hi Brian, hope you got a key to the door in here by now?

Nice write, and I too like how you play with words.

Ace of Crimson Tears
Junior Member

since 2006-03-03

Posts 14
United States

6 posted 2006-04-10 11:41 AM

That was the best thing I've read so far. Brian you're an awsome poet!

~Matt~

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2006-04-10 12:19 PM

Breat poem brian!! It's really good to see you!

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