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idrift2u
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0 posted 2002-07-12 06:25 PM


Gather,
to fester,
the wounded animals come.
Hundreds aged and gray,
glancing backward,
coming undone.


The weak kneed,
and the suffering young.
Inexperienced,
shuttering,
dangling tongue.


Circling,
cleverly circumnavigating.
So solace,
so convenient
and apparently irritating.


Surrounding this gathering,
a chant,
a howl.
A melancholy narration
wounds ripen,
open,
so fowl.


Boasting reruns,
trite,
and disguised.
Conquering cleverly,
philosophically,
however, pseudo logically,
undermine,
determinedly.


Fashioning normality,
a combative compulsion.
Guiding them,
ancient prosecutions,
set in motion.


One,
perpetually crouching
huffs,
drools,
and always growling.


Oppositely within it's kind,
it differs in expression,
eyes glazed over,
eloquently,
reflects compassion.


Their wounds pulsing
craving,
injections.
Offerings of fairy tales,
exchange,
imaginary infections.


Operating on instinct,
condemned from the start.
Passing around the crown of thorns,
cowardly,
abort.


Separation is futile,
the medicine has been rationed.
Wounds slowly close,
memories,
rehearsed,
a coming attraction.


Ascension,
harefooted,
a defensive stance.
Clever, and quick whited
secure the herd,
ironic,
from a glance.


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PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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1 posted 2002-07-12 06:55 PM


"Their wounds pulsing
craving,
injections.
Offerings of fairy tales,
exchange,
imaginary infections."

I love it.  It's a long and beautiful post.
Continue sharing your talent...
"ironic from a glance"

Sometimes tragedy is the best way...

idrift2u
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2 posted 2002-07-12 07:45 PM


Hey, Thanks....
brian sites
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3 posted 2002-07-13 12:05 PM


drift
not sure what it means
but you have a gift
this looks to me like your best
like the images and the weird little points that jar the reader from simply reading mindlessly
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

idrift2u
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4 posted 2002-07-13 07:23 AM


Hey, Thanks BS
hugs

hey, thanks for the B-Day card too!

wranx
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5 posted 2002-07-13 08:14 AM


Very, very nice drifter,

I got a sense of the "uncivilized" amongst us from this. I'm glad you're here.

~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do...provided it's done in private and you wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

GoddessofHell
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6 posted 2002-07-13 05:14 PM


Very nice...

Heather

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7 posted 2002-07-13 08:53 PM


Surreally cool.

(signed,

th' pun police -- arresting themselves!)

She said burn ... together.
-TON

idrift2u
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8 posted 2002-07-13 08:55 PM


tanks
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