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Fade into you
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Fade into you |
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Chameleon Member
since 2002-08-07
Posts 99Australia |
Fade into you Fade into you. close your eyes, fading in with the back of your eyelids. an exhausting slow tune, so i breathe and i smile...stubbornly Fading into shadow. looking for me, finding only that I am empty. looking for you, fade. |
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LADY_DEATH Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 105Fl |
That was very deep and i liked the way you had to think about its meaning. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
its nice to sink into someone, and it can be a fine line, not to completely lose yourself at the same time. very very good thougts expressed well |
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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
There's something about this piece that's soothing yet jarring. The rhythm to it is-to me, anyway-very relaxing and peaceful, like being inside a warm house on a bitterly cold night and feeling safe and relaxed; yet the words themselves seem sharp. It's a very interesting-and enjoyable-mixture. Excellent work! Carson If homosexuality is a disease, let's all call in queer to work: "Hello. Can't work today, still queer." (If only...>; P) |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I really liked this one. There's something euphoric about the line "an exhausting slow tune, so i breathe and i smile...stubbornly". Nicely done! *Me* |
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Long Island Slim New Member
since 2002-12-12
Posts 4 |
remniscent of a heroin overdose...thats a compliment.. |
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