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brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2002-07-09 01:40 AM


my spit is
ten years old
suspended
reflecting twenty years of sun
(ghosts aren't real)
landing on blue nylon.

OKAY! ARE YOU HAPPY!

semi-surprised eyes
look from lapel to
uncertainty
turns to
high pitched tone

face recoiling
bore aimed at me
primitive sounds surrounds us
a perfect, glistening globe
emerges, and spins like a rainbow
tinted with resignation
landing on my cheek
like a kiss
   from an insolent
     god.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

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LMNOP
New Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 7
NY, USA
1 posted 2002-07-09 02:01 AM


My commorancy assistant/concubine once articulated as you do so befittingly to me amid consumption.

Nice...

Thanks

idrift2u
Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 60
MD., USA
2 posted 2002-07-09 12:38 PM


Hey Brian!
  Good work! , not sure what it means...
I haven't posted any poems yet, not sure if I have anything good.

Keep posting, and I'll keep critiquing...(sp?)

Later

devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
3 posted 2002-07-09 04:57 PM


Pretty strong stuff to ponder here Brian...

landing on my cheek
like a kiss
   from an insolent
     god.


yep, that'll do it...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



brian sites
Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475
usa
4 posted 2002-07-10 07:44 PM


not really devina
just some moronic boys
spitting at each other
on afterschool playground
you know - chestbeating crap
(i lost)
On second reading
it does seem more ominous than that
sorry
Thanks for reading
BS.

bsquirrel
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-07-13 07:02 PM


Makes me want to watch 2001 and scratch my head,sayin' Huh? a lot. (that movie'll do that to y')

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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