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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-07-07 03:23 AM



She wipes her tears with calloused hands --
watches their watery imprint grow.
Rose is shredded in bass strings.
Flowers on the wire slow.
No more words said from her friend.
Went for permanency's sake.
All the song they wrote together
sound now lifeless, tinny, fake.

Alone, she gives to shake.

If only, if only, that ugly phrase
makes its way across her lips.
She just wants a time of when.
A time of where. Without slips.
She will be memory's ghost.
Tinging even joy with pain.
Nothing left, another breath
to wish that breath would break the rain.

Waiting for the train.

Sometimes wants to join the tracks.
Feel the weight of purpose met.
Instead she sleeps and drowns in dreams.
The sea is strong and won't forget.
Just toss the rocks among her tide.
Break the stones across her back.
Turn her face this way, just once.
Turn it back. Oh, turn it back.

Sky begins to crack.

The diamond star-fed black of moon.
Promise of a cool breeze night.
Train arrives. Jessie gets on.
Gives her ticket. Clicks the light.
Sliding now away from her.
Driving faster from herself.
Wonders should she play again
or lay the bass in dust on shelf.

Just something else.
Please, something else.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-07-07 03:36 AM


"Sometimes wants to join the tracks.
Feel the weight of purpose met.
Instead she sleeps and drowns in dreams."

and?

"Sliding now away from her.
Driving faster from herself.
Wonders should she play again
or lay the bass in dust on shelf.

Just something else.
Please, something else."


Maddening, ain't it?

This tuned into my heart's thread so profoudly...thanks...I think...

yer beautiful.

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2 posted 2002-07-07 05:16 AM



Enjoyed

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

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3 posted 2002-07-07 01:08 PM


SHEW!
clicking on your posts is like
opening a christmas present.
more perfection.
Thanks
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

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4 posted 2002-07-07 07:34 PM


Thanks, all. Me so angsty an' sad.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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5 posted 2002-07-07 09:17 PM


This one touches me on a personal level and I'm not exactly sure why...

Good one, Mikey...
~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

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6 posted 2002-07-07 09:21 PM


Tier,
That's 'cause it's the most personal thing I've ever written here.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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7 posted 2002-07-08 04:47 AM


Felt personal to me too... I loved the style of this. Reminded me of me, maybe that's just because it's late and you used my name, lol.  Great work once again.

~Jess

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8 posted 2002-07-08 11:22 AM


thought I read this earlier??? I think I did...and had to rush away...*sigh*

I can feel the despondant urge that is your poetry here Mikey...

crazy thang...that train...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



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9 posted 2002-07-08 02:33 PM


Hey, Jess. No worries, it's not about you! (it's actually about me, but that's a long, convoluted mess of a thing)

And, devina! Despondent urge? That alone needs to be a poem!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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10 posted 2002-07-10 06:47 AM


Since you, though only for the time being, win, I should get my butt into gear and respond to the backlog fr all th' world to see, huh?

I love you, baby. No Jessie-cryin' allowed, 'cause this poem then makes *me* cry, and that's not good. 'Cause no matter what Kim goes and does in the stories, I ain't gonna follow after her. Well, that's a lie, since I already am, but I won't follow her to her waaaaaay too bitter end.

So there, squirrely-boy.

"Es ist Folter, aber ich bin fast dort." Robert Smith's Torture in Deutsch.

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11 posted 2002-07-10 11:55 AM


Something is very evident by reading yr outpourin' of heart, baby. I need a bass! Love y'!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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12 posted 2002-08-28 10:30 AM


I was reading back through all yr Kissably poems. As I'm almost entirely sure this is the only one on PiP, I'll use it to talk through.

Finally written the music for Begging Forgiveness, and I'm working on another chapter. It's what's got me down, more'n anything else. Back in the beginning, she was just distraught, but as it gets more and more evident that she can't survive, it's getting harder and harder to write it.

How many incarnations of myself do I hafta kill before there's nothing left, anyway?

Blah.

This poem still doesn't fail to bring tears to my eyes. The inevitable, as well, though there's nothing soft about that one.

Poor Ms. Kissably.

Is everyone in my head a tortured soul?

i'll be waiting for you
do exactly what you're told

jm

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13 posted 2002-08-28 11:43 AM


You have the power to change the outcome
if y' want.

*kiss*

Mikey

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14 posted 2002-08-28 12:08 PM


No, I have no power to change the outcome. I knew from day one I was writin' another tragedy. Others in th' story can get their happily ever after, but it's just not fr Kim, y'know?

i'll be waiting for you
do exactly what you're told

jm

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15 posted 2002-08-28 12:39 PM


*long hug* Awright. By the way, I think something I just wrote was inspired by this exchange... Here it comes (in Dark).
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16 posted 2002-08-28 03:43 PM


Boy do I enjoy reading your pieces!  And still do I envy your talent! In yet I come back for more?  Doesnt make much sense!  Great work here once again (dont you ever tire of hearing that?)

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

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17 posted 2002-08-28 03:51 PM


Dragon Mistress ,

I prefer that to "How tall are you? Do you play basketball?" (I'm 6-foot-10, you see)

Mike

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18 posted 2002-08-28 04:26 PM


Wow...6'10"? Eat lotsa veggies when you were a kid??
-Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

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19 posted 2002-08-28 04:32 PM


That reminds me of a story ...

Back in high school (graduated 1995, graduated university 1999) there was this group of idiots who said "Hey Stretch, why are you so tall?"

I responded "Lots of Flintstones vitamins and milk."

They seemed flummoxed for a second, then one of the kids offered ... "You're funkin' weird, man." Only it wasn't funkin'.

Yes, I am, thank you.

Anyway, I have a genetic disorder/mutation called Marfan's Syndrome. It results in stretched ligaments, a sort of androgyne face due to bone structure, an increased possibility of an aneurysm, and good poetry, apparently.  

Heart Pill Mike

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20 posted 2002-08-28 04:34 PM


ahh...I suppose that'd explain it...good poetry definately!
-Tanya

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21 posted 2002-08-28 04:36 PM


I actually got really lucky. I mean, my eyesight is the pits and it's hard to find clothes, but some people who have Marfan's (it's a pretty rare genetic mutation -- they think Abe Lincoln had it, as well as one of the more androgynous pharoahs) die from it very young, and spend their lives in a wheel chair.

I figure, if I ever get famous, I'll definitely have to raise awareness of it. And even if I don't get famous, I'll still try.  

Have a good day, Tanya.

Mike

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22 posted 2002-08-28 04:45 PM


You too Mike!  And thanks for making me aware!  Its great to learn something new every day!
-Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

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23 posted 2002-08-28 05:05 PM


Tanya,
Glad to provide
some mind input for y'.

Mike

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24 posted 2002-08-28 07:45 PM


Great post, is 1am here now, and I will read it again in the morning to feel it better.
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25 posted 2002-08-28 10:36 PM


Zall,

Whichever time you read,
hope y' enjoy.



Mike

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26 posted 2002-08-28 11:11 PM


Mike,
I responded to this before
seems inadequate now
reading your talk with
the Dragon Miss
and not only in this
but, you are always raising awareness
and I've said before
say it again
You are a Gift to this place
your big gentle heart
is second only
to Lyra's
in my book
and I know
being second to her would be like
DID I JUST WIN THE LOTTERY?
nuff said

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27 posted 2002-08-28 11:32 PM


Thanks, brian. Your words mean a lot to me.

Mike

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28 posted 2002-08-29 10:53 AM


Mikhail, honey... If you have such a big, gentle heart, what're you doing going out with a bitch like me? Jus' curious.

i'll be waiting for you
do exactly what you're told

jm

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29 posted 2002-08-29 11:40 AM


I dunno, so we cancel each other out? That's a pretty down view of love, isn't it? Okay ... so we strengthen each other. How's that?

Mike

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30 posted 2002-08-29 12:42 PM


How about say we just confuse each other immensely, and leave it all there? Lovely baby. I'm a brat.

i'll be waiting for you
do exactly what you're told

jm

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31 posted 2002-08-29 12:49 PM


Cute cute cute cute you!


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