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Judgment Day |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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Judgment Day I sometimes sit and wonder- just what it would be like, If I could venture farther- from the dying of the light… An angel from the heavens- would finally spread her wings, Fly away from all the faces- And learn the happiness evil brings… Dancing ‘round the fire- In the burning pits of hell, She’d share all the secrets- she swore she’d never tell… She finally found herself- at dark corner of the earth, The one girl- who thought she’d never hurt… She stands all alone now- With no one on her side, Her demons have escaped- and there’s nowhere she can hide… She wrestles with her conscience- through the flashing lights, With handcuffs ‘round her wrists- she knows it’s useless to fight… Bail would not come early- for she deserved no pity on her soul, And as the bars slammed shut- her body grew very cold… As the judge stared down upon her- she decided not to lie, Now she finally realized- He didn’t deserve to die… This was an early one I came across (OK-DUG for- for a loved one..G*) I think...13...sounds about right... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... [This message has been edited by devina (07-05-2002 10:06 PM).] |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Yet another good one from the infamous devina. Keep em' comin' babe!! Kris A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well, It's a little late now, dontcha think? Jeez, I hate it when that happens. Thanks, "D" ~wranx |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
D/T -- Great stuff. My poetry was abysmal at 13. I really enjoyed this. YOu even spelled judgment right!  (says someone who can't capitalize you rightly)Babbleguy These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun. |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Very dark, and very liked. Wonderful write, Devina. ~Jess |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
i used pens for chewing and as projectiles when i was thirteen...never for writing, certainly not like this. (i still can't quite write like this...) this reminded me of the movie "the way of the gun". it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Kris- you try so hard to make me blush huh darlin?? *G ty sweetie.... wranx- don't I know it sir!! Thank you for the read... Mike- well I won't EVER spill my lil secret of SPELL CHECK...O G's mr...capital T if you will...thanks you... Jessica- thanks sweetie for that... Midnight Son- you've got quite your own edge now...I am proof of the read!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
liked it arthur |
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powerofthysword Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 116Glendale, AZ USA |
I like the way you think Devina, I especially like the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs of this wonderfully composed work of art. Staring into the sun just makes you blind to what beauty actually exists in the sky. |
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GoddessofHell Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 76 |
Dancing ‘round the fire- In the burning pits of hell, She’d share all the secrets- she swore she’d never tell… Can relate to this...I love your poems. Look forward to them everyday. Heather |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
I'm sure Mike's comment about spelling Judgment right was a comment about something I did when I was 13, but I won't rip his throat out until I know for sure. 13.... How the hell could you write like that when you were 13?? I'm going to pretend I had just never picked up a pen at that age. *blush* It was garbled, angsty, bitter, messed up garbage then. "Es ist Folter, aber ich bin fast dort." Robert Smith's Torture in Deutsch. |
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