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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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Succubus I became friendly with the girl That lived alone in the apartment Across the hall from mine Her short red hair, bright emerald eyes And a decidedly waiflike build Made her a painfully appealing package Sometimes, late in the night She would let herself into my apartment And upstairs to my bedroom to see Whether or not I was alone Always dressed only in a nightgown Sometimes of silk, sometimes of flannel She would climb into bed with me Careful not to wake me Cold bare feet on my shins Announced her arrival nonetheless Her small frame would spoon into me My chin on the top of her head One breast against my forearm The other in my hand Her bottom pressed into me Mostly, I think she came just for closeness To feel the warmth of another I would listen to her sigh softly Before drifting away to sleep And I would feel wholly protective On other visitations she, or I, or we Would become aroused by this Quiet arrangement, this odd intimacy And reaching behind, would guide me into her As she turned to offer a kiss Once, my girlfriend and I were awakened By my succubus standing at the bedside Bearing a tray of hot coffee and warm muffins This, I told my girlfriend, is my perfect neighbor This, I told my perfect neighbor, is a bad idea And so it went for several remarkable weeks Until she moved away with a new love Leaving me to listen for the rustle of her nightgown And the creak the bed would make When she would slip beneath my blankets ~wranx "Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do....just remember to wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-10-2002 06:24 PM).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Beneath the blankets, or beneath my blankets, but not both.  I loved this poem, wranx. Yr fast becomin' one of my favorite Darklings. (what a stupid title)Of course, now I have to dig up MY old succubus poetry. Bitter stuff, that. These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks squirrel dude, maybe you could fix that for me (I prefer "my").Must be the acid I did in the 60s'... As you can probably see, I really don't write the bitter stuff, I prefer mine bittersweet. Such is life...you mellow. ~wranx "Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do....just remember to wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I looked at several titles like this in here, and when my eyes found your name on this I had to open it. I wasn't dissappointed. You have an instant fan.  I LOVED this It gave me a pleasant shiver or two..or three...hell..a lot of them.  I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement. |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
do you know where she is ? seems a perfect dear to me arthur |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
diggin fer gold found a nugget, I did hope ya doan mind wranx BS |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I've been accused of being the succubus. I don't bear your darlings' image though. I have long dark brown hair and eyes that somehow manage to drift between dark and light (being both dark brown and deep green)... I never had a "perfect neighbor" though unfortunately. I like the bittersweet taste of this. I think that if it were bitter it'd lose what makes it precious. It's gem.. shiny.. I don't normally come in here, but tonight I'm glad that I wandered off.. I'm married to Mr.Metaphor. We make love everyday. [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (08-13-2002 11:24 PM).] |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
oh she remembers her cookies but forgets her mittens.. how typical "you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A. |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
closeness is a godsend, as are your words. another infamous glimpse, wranx. i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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Chameleon Member
since 2002-08-07
Posts 99Australia |
Well, i'd say for someone who has never had a desire to write, you probably should make the best of it if it is a passing thing of yours, keep writing, perhaps a collection of short stories.And sell them! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Dear sweet wranx, if you see her brother, incubus, send him my way. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A thank you to bs for diggin' this up. A thank you to all for reading it. ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
More nice work....smooches! ti amo DeaDiAmore |
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John B Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 68Texas, USA |
wow, that was talent. i like it. how long did you spend on this? |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Oh, how I enjoyed this. Yes, indeed. Indeed. Sincerely, Titus "I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come." |
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A. L. Becker Member
since 2002-09-06
Posts 167San Francisco, California |
bravo, wranx, bravo!!! Annika:- "Oh, do not ask, 'What is it?' |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
interesting indeed...*goes away now* I came I saw I liked!!  Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Wranx----I'll be back---you'll know by the rustling of my gown....tehe EA |
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Scarlet Lady Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242Midwest |
Shaaaazzzzzzzaaaaammmmmm Baby!!! Holy Cow! Sounds like me in a Movie gone bad!!! I kid you not. Do I know you??? Is this imagination or am I coming back to haunt you? Just too wild of an "imaginatory" write that is TOO real for ME. Great stuff here. Going to bed now beneath my "blanket" and dream of my neighbor's!! arghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks all for the reading of this and for the nicest of comments. Cienwyn.......slips away EarthAngal....promises a return ScarletLady, not a fiction, but a remarkable young woman that I was blessed with for a while. She would be the "Horse Artist" in my poem "Odd Lot" [This message has been edited by wranx (09-10-2002 09:50 AM).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Made the fix for you. And, reading this again, it is quite obvious to me you are a natural writer. mike |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
you and your stories Ed... and here I would tell my boyfriend to keep the pretty neighbor around to do my laundry and warm our sheets. EG* always had a weakness for them red heads in my single days as well. enjoyed this man!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What an enjoyable diversion from the open blues. This is really well written. I shall have to stop by this forum more often. I used to read here a year ago, then for some reason, just stopped comin in. Now where is that damn blankie! |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
what an interesting life you have lead why does nothing like that ever happen to me! arthur |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang!! YOU are fantastic!! Sorry...got a little excited there... geesh...a little? Okay...a lot. Excellent writing...loved this. ~Hugs~ |
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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
What an incredible story! Excellent write! Makes me want to be naughty.  |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Ohhhh I love this soooooo much!!! I think I expressed this and I can't really post a reply each time I read it..haha cos well it'd be alot of responses Yours Truly, Catwyn If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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