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Krishankins
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0 posted 2002-06-24 02:14 AM



Clear blue hands of water
A heart they try to clasp
Love's fleeting breath exhaling
Hope bubbles through their grasp

your 100grit love is smoothing my soul

© Copyright 2002 Kristopher Hankins - All Rights Reserved
Anvrill
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1 posted 2002-06-24 11:11 AM


"Love's fleeting breath exhaling."

I so wish I could write like this.

Feel my angsty reachiness!

bsquirrel
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2 posted 2002-06-24 10:33 PM


Wow! Great use of imagery for this one ...

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

Purity
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3 posted 2002-06-25 04:10 AM


If those hands trying to clasp the heart were truly clear, then we'd both (and all) be living a glorious life of immortal bliss. The smallest of "heart of the rose" statements. I loved it. I've lived it. Thanks!`!

[This message has been edited by Purity (06-25-2002 04:10 AM).]

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