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Deepdarkangel55
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Somewhere deep in wonder

0 posted 2002-06-24 01:24 AM


My first love left me
My best friend died
My hopes and dreams faded away
My world crashed around me
I cried for many days and nights
Nothing seem to ease the pain
I decided to do something dramatic
I knew in time I would regret it or what was going to be left
As I went gun in my hand, something came over me
All I remember is bright flashes and a voice
Next thing I knew  I was down on the floor praying
From there on I knew there was somthing out there to ease the pain
In the end I found what I was looking for
Have you found it?

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bsquirrel
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1 posted 2002-06-24 01:28 AM


Very powerful poem. It reminds me of a scene from Johnny the Homicidal Maniac (don't laugh, it's a well-thought out, awesomely drawn book) where 'Nny puts a gun to his head and says "Over the stars." Doesn't do it, though. Like this.

I like how the answer is left as a question, too.

Great poem.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

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