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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-06-22 01:54 PM


I come unwound in my room,
leaving black ribbons on my bed.
Playing through my head,
the last thing that she said.
Her beckonings and demands,
shiver-soft and whisper-thin.
Playing through the thoughts
that couldn't last in her wake.

I see her shape in candles.
I see her shadow in my drapes.
I see her hands reaching out
to hold a dying sun.
Her hands are burning embers,
glowing coals as long, sharp nails.
In her every breath, destruction,
and I cannot wish
to last in her wake.

Her hair is full of fire.
I choke on her smoke.
I choke to death in dreams of her
and wake up full of stale air.
Her consuming eyes
make me want to drown in flame,
gulping in heat waves
as her beauty drags me down.

The ribbons I left
curl like snakes.
Orange glow
in place of a choice.
The polished posts of my tousled bed
reflect flickering heat and lights
that could never be there.

She falls on slow as a sunrise,
implicit of its heat.
She sears new scars into my body.
Curdled, melting sheets.
I call her name among the flame.
She gives me burning kiss.
My body engorged by her flame.
Again I call her name.

She reaches out and I beg for her fire,
her closeness sears my skin.
She reaches past me,
hands trailing in the ribbons on my bed.
A brilliant smile,
all light and smoke,
and she winds me up again.

I tremble in the heat.
Shiver at my undoing.
The sky is turning to thick smoke --
dark kisses for the clouds.

There is nothing left of me.
There is nothing left of her.
Floating sweet gentle fragrance
of our love interred.

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (06-22-2002 02:00 PM).]

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Tiersdin
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1 posted 2002-06-22 02:00 PM


Wow! You guys are perfect together... it's honestly hard to discern who wrote what line!

excellent!

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Anvrill
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2 posted 2002-06-22 02:03 PM


*squeals, claps hands, jumps for joy, hugs her morbid rodent!*


Our very firstest written-together an' posted poem thingy! Yay!


Okay, I think that proves I need to sleep sometime VERY soon.


But still!


Though I find it funny that he writes with "another woman" (well, y' are! Just not in that oogie sense ), it's about relationship, and when he writes with me, it's about a dangerously hot (ooh, pun!) grrl.


No complaints.

Feel my angsty reachiness!

bsquirrel
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3 posted 2002-06-22 02:08 PM


Hey, cool! I'm now a possession to be batted around by two different women! Nah, Lori does own me. But she lets me off my leash t' come and frolick in poetic verse every now and again! What? No! I've been good. Please ... put that away. Put that --- OH MY GOD! MY LEGS!!!!! *gasp* Why did you ... why did you? NO! AAAAAHHHH! I'LL BE GOOD!!!

Just kidding.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Anvrill
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4 posted 2002-06-22 02:10 PM


Hey, my whip's in pretty rough shape, babe. It'd unravel if I wasted it on spontaneous use!
bsquirrel
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5 posted 2002-06-22 02:11 PM


*gulp* I soooo have to move to Calgary!!!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Tiersdin
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6 posted 2002-06-22 02:12 PM


You two are hilarious!

*chuckles*
~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Anvrill
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7 posted 2002-06-22 02:17 PM


Thank you! I pride myself in being completely insane, and if it weren't amusing to at least a few people, I wouldn't see the point in it anymore.


Oh, right, I'm s'pposed to be goth... Sorry, gotta' go be dreary now.



I'm havin' too much fun!

Feel my angsty reachiness!

Tiersdin
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8 posted 2002-06-22 02:20 PM


I'm glad that you've decided to join Passions, Lori!

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

bsquirrel
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9 posted 2002-06-22 02:20 PM


Arrrrrgh! Powerful moderator type here again!

You two must stop! Now! Maintenant! Jetzt!

You must!

Do not make me do raging-kung-chuck fist punch of glory!

*does raging-kung-chuck fist punch of glory*

OH MY GOD! MY WRIST! I BROKE MY WRIST!

........so faint............colors swirling away........... so dark ...................
Excellent........*wheeze* d-d---dddark

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Anvrill
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10 posted 2002-06-22 02:21 PM


Aw, lookit th' cute Filler-Bunny wannabe!

Feel my angsty reachiness!

bsquirrel
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11 posted 2002-06-22 02:22 PM


No, no ... Filler bunny would be

I do my joy of dance for you!

Whee! It is my job to be your happy bunny, even when my world is mired in sickness and despair! Yahoo!!!

Watch my dance! Are you watching?

So tired ... please. Let me feel the cold embrace of the tomb. You promised. You promised!

Oh well.

See?

She said burn ... together.
-TON

wranx
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12 posted 2002-06-23 12:13 PM


Scuse me, pardon me...scuse please, just tryin' to...pardon me, get a word in....pardon, edgewise.

What was I gonna say? Oh, yeah. Liked this one. You can go back to...whatever, now

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do....just remember to wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

LadyPeach1
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13 posted 2002-06-23 01:05 PM


Oh my gosh!  You guys are GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!! I loved the poem, but reading all that feedback you all left had me in a state of histeria!  I think you all have some really cool personalities!  Your my kind of people!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  Overall, this poem was really really tight and you all work together terrifacly!  If that's even a word?  Who knows, Who cares!!!! AWESOME JOB YOU GUYS!!  Keep up the good poetry, and the comedy!!!!!!!
LP1

bsquirrel
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14 posted 2002-06-23 01:46 PM


Life is comedy -- our poetry is misery. Er, vice versa. Or somethin'...

Thanks, wranx and LP1. (dude, I so wish I had some vinyls -- Lori's got a bunch of Cure vinyls, lucky .... grrl)

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Anvrill
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15 posted 2002-06-23 04:01 PM


Mikhail, you are SO easily distracted, it hurts.

And not only do I have Cure, babe, but Sisters, Slits, Bauhaus, NIN, etc. I rock! So there.

Love y', silly.

Feel my angsty reachiness!

Krishankins
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16 posted 2002-06-23 06:54 PM


It's almost as if watching a silent movie in my head. (the replies....okay, the poem too)

anyway, i liked it a lot. i'm new to Passions, and i'm not farmiliar to either poet's work. i can say that it reminded me of a braided ficus tree. so wonderfully woven together that you can't tell where one ends and the other begins


Krishankins

your 100grit love is smoothing my soul

Temptress
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17 posted 2002-07-05 02:16 AM


ALRIGHTY THEN!!
This HAS to be back at the top just because its too excellent to fall to the bottom.

Betcha din't know I was a Dark kinda girl, eh? or if I ever came out of Open or Adult.



Loved this...a little too much prolly

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

devina
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18 posted 2002-07-06 12:23 PM


Her hair is full of fire.
I choke on her smoke.
I choke to death in dreams of her
and wake up full of stale air.
Her consuming eyes
make me want to drown in flame,
gulping in heat waves
as her beauty drags me down.

(might start a war here) but I just loved this part!!!

You two should do this more often..and? drop some in adult!! *calling out to Lori* ~come...join us~

You two are so freakin adorable..and you know what I do to my own adorable things? I squeal about it then squish em a bit...so BE CAREFUL!!! smiles...

loved this...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



bsquirrel
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19 posted 2002-07-07 02:51 AM


I'm glad you all enjoyed. This is the kind of stuff that breaks my heart, knowing that Lori will no longer post here. But her ghost will be everywhere. Hopefully, it won't be so bad if I just keep my head down and move on.

Sucks.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

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