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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2002-06-12 11:42 PM



  This girl wasn't as strong as you. I know that your situation is/was different, but your "Growth Spurts" reminded me of her.

Poor Donna

She was invisible, or nearly so.
Sort of a tertiary person.
Her name was Donna,
or Debbie,
or Deirdre
and, she was alone,
for no obvious reason.

She walked the halls of her school
alone in the midst of the student throng,
part of no circle,
member of no clique,
just a barely perceived presence.

One would hardly notice
that she had long hair,
and long legs,
and long wished to be shed of her lot.

She never raised an eyebrow.
She never raised her voice.
She never really spoke.
No one really ever spoke to her
and no one spoke about her.

Yet, it was generally known,
that is to say, rumored and gossiped,
that her family was exceedingly poor,
that her home was little more than a shack,
that her father was a mean spirited brute,
and that he “did things” to her.

And this, this alone,
this is what made her a pariah,
an outcast in perhaps the only place
where it might be possible to find solace,
relief from her familiar situation.

Then, one evening
while talking on the telephone
to a boy that liked her,
but, wouldn’t admit it,
she pointed her fathers’ gun
at the hurtful place
she thought her heart must be
and made it all
just
go
away.

I do hope the anonymous boy
from 35 years ago
has kept some part of her
close and dear and safe
or, at the very least,
remembers her name.
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If this was inappropriate, I'll apologize now.

~wranx


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arthur
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1 posted 2002-06-13 02:59 PM


well done
arthur


Gemini
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2 posted 2002-06-13 10:03 PM


Thank you, your poem touched me and was very appropriate.  Though her name may have been forgotten, I think this poem speaks for alot of people who have grown up like her and have touched every one of us at some time or another.  I thank you for reminding me of those among the forgotten.
wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
3 posted 2002-06-13 10:34 PM


Thank you Gemini for your kind thoughts. Although I am not the young man
mentioned, this thing broke my heart many years ago. I am still bothered by the...waste of it all. She was a perfectly good human being in all respects. Well...

~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do....just remember to wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-06-20 09:58 PM


........so true.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Tiersdin
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5 posted 2002-06-22 12:43 PM


Touching... very...

well done, Wranx...

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Anvrill
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since 2002-06-21
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in the interzone now
6 posted 2002-06-22 09:58 AM


Ow... In that good, tingly way, but also the really oogie too-close-to-home sorta way.

You're very good.


-Lori

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
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7 posted 2002-07-14 02:59 PM


can't let this haunting piece go
this girl and her witness
dig in deep past the retinas
and stay there
for a long time
awesome
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

GoddessofHell
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since 2002-07-09
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8 posted 2002-07-14 03:48 PM


Great poem!!!!

Heather

idrift2u
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since 2002-07-09
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9 posted 2002-07-14 10:32 PM


Hey, I remember this one wranx,
still good,
you know, you should make a book...


hug, and love!

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