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Songbird
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0 posted 2002-06-12 06:53 PM



The chain of pain is endless
Each loop strong and hard
Forged with hot ore
Turned frigid cold
Links tightly bound together
Unyielding strength binds
Threads of steel
Binding pain
Loop by loop
Link by link

A chain is only as strong as it's weakest link
Or is the weakest link the strongest?

© Copyright 2002 Marcia Estep - All Rights Reserved
wranx
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1 posted 2002-06-12 11:32 PM


Succinct and well crafted.
Very, very nice.
~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do....just remember to wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
2 posted 2002-06-22 12:07 PM


This poem is deserving of more comment than it received, so I'll say again...very nice.

Now, write about the pain, not the chain.

It is right there, waiting to be commited to paper. Start the pen, it wants to be written.

~wranx

bsquirrel
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3 posted 2002-06-22 12:11 PM


I like this chain, even when I get wrapped in it and start seeing strange colors and ... uh ... yes, very cool!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Anvrill
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since 2002-06-21
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4 posted 2002-06-22 03:05 PM


Ooh, mind-trippy and moody. I most definitely approve.

Feel my angsty reachiness!

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
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5 posted 2002-06-22 03:56 PM


Ditto all of the above...

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Temptress
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6 posted 2002-07-05 02:18 AM


Okies.
May I just say how much I miss your work?
Loved this, Lady.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

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