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kinson
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since 2002-05-13
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somewhere between here and there

0 posted 2002-06-11 09:01 AM


What happened
Where did you go
Did you leave me
I don’t know
Am I bitter
Yes and no
But I feel I’m reaching a new low
When I have time to think things are different
When you’re not around things seem to change
A wave in the hall is reassuring
But your love seems so long ago
It’s late and I think I’m leaving
Rest up for a new day
All ways in my dreams we were together
But even there you’ve gone away


© Copyright 2002 Chris - All Rights Reserved
LadyPeach1
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since 2001-06-04
Posts 282

1 posted 2002-06-11 10:20 AM


It really hurts when the person you love doesn't love you back.  Its hard whenever you've made a committment to someone and they just blow it off and simply don't care.  Good expression of feelings here!  Write on.
LP1

Neala
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since 1999-08-21
Posts 262
Florida, USA
2 posted 2002-06-11 01:40 PM


I am sorry they don't love you...although good poem.
-Neala

renathon
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since 2002-06-09
Posts 23

3 posted 2002-06-11 01:58 PM



This poem reminds me of one I wrote where I would see the back of someone I had a crush on, but it really wasn't him, and it wouldn't have mattered since he wouldn't have thought twice about me.  I like your poem, where's the question marks though?

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bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-06-24 01:13 AM


The best part is when y' get over it and find a new love. It takes time, though. Good poem.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

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