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kinson Member
since 2002-05-13
Posts 66somewhere between here and there |
Did you look back when you were through And wonder why you did the things you do Did it hurt as bad for you Leave you broken and feeling blue When you woke up from your sleep Did you find that you were in too deep Did you have to count your sheep Or did you slumber without a peep When you look back and you cry Remember that it was all a lie It was never just you and I It bothers me that you dont know Your wounds wont remind you cause they dont show Guess you never felt the blow Me, I'm gonna fall, look out below |
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kinson Member
since 2002-05-13
Posts 66somewhere between here and there |
iv been working with difernt styles so please tell me if this is bad |
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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
This wasn't bad at all! This was a very good write. Everyone has there own talent and style and I like yours! Good job! WRITE ON! LP1 |
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Neala Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262Florida, USA |
That is cool I like the new style....keep writing. -Neala |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey Kinson - if you want advice on your poetry why don't you check your critique flag which you can find in your profile (by going to the member's area at the top of the screen)... Experimenting with new styles is always challenging... well done  K |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Ah, so that's what hit me when I walked outside this morning -- yr fallin' form. Uh ... liked it. *kaboom* These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun. |
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