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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2002-06-10 07:17 PM


Time
When did this happen to me?
I’ve been aware of the eventuality
Overtaking me from afar
Like a slowly rising tide
Like a fogbank rolling in
To swallow me up

But always from a distance
And never an immediate concern
Now, in a blink, it seems
It has caught me
The affliction of time

Not old age, though that too
Starts to loom
There
In the distance
Not an immediate concern

But the age that drapes you
Like a threadbare cloak
Like a patina of rust

The age when young men
No longer fear you
Yet, you fear no one

The age when young women
No longer desire you
Yet, your desire is undiminished

This thing now challenges me
To garner a new respect
To find a new romance
Using the very tools
That time has given me
While wearing its’ raiment


~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do....just remember to wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

© Copyright 2002 E.F.Rose - All Rights Reserved
LadyPeach1
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1 posted 2002-06-11 10:23 AM


Well I liked this poem alot because my uncle just passed away and I felt like this poem described how alot of my family felt, because we felt it wasn't his time yet to go and I felt like the time I did have with him was very special and something I can always cherish.  thanks for sharing this piece.
Lp1

Tiersdin
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2 posted 2002-06-11 11:54 AM


Most interesting write. Enjoyed reading...

~R.T.

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
3 posted 2002-06-11 05:50 PM


Thank you lady and tiersdin for your kind words. I should like to follow up by perusing some of your work.


~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do....just remember to wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-06-24 01:15 AM


Great job, wranx. Luckily, the fog hasn't come in yet for me ... but it's inevitable, isn't it?

Thanks for showing me what I have to look forward to.

Love yr writin'.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

Krishankins
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5 posted 2002-06-24 02:30 AM


nice way of putting the unavoidable into the very bearable. almost makes me somber to read it. otherwise i love it.

your 100grit love is smoothing my soul

Anvrill
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since 2002-06-21
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6 posted 2002-06-24 10:43 AM


Very good. Though nothing should be allowed to make me think at this time in the morning... Hm.

Feel my angsty reachiness!

News_From_Nowhere
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since 2002-06-14
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CU, NY
7 posted 2002-06-24 03:58 PM


Simply inspirational to the enscribing desire! Excellent use of simile in a most poignant way! I did engross myself in this one.
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