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Neala
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0 posted 2002-06-09 04:25 PM



Without a doubt
I know nothing is left
You ripped me apart
Piece by piece
Thinking of only yourself

Did you think of me when you left
Did you think of me when you did what you did
Did you think of me at all

What about the fact
That you have a duty to me
I am your daughter
And you are what they call a father
But your still not here

Did you think at all

Neala

© Copyright 2002 Rachel Parrish - All Rights Reserved
Hopeless Romantic
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since 2002-05-22
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1 posted 2002-06-09 10:13 PM


I like this one,I can really feel it.
I can feel the emotion.
Hope to read more.
    

Neala
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2 posted 2002-06-09 10:14 PM


Thanks Matt but you know you say you want to read more you have read everything I own almost.
-Neala

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
3 posted 2002-06-09 11:17 PM


Did you think of me when you left
Did you think of me when you did what you did
Did you think of me at all

If this is as real as it seems to be, I think that your father should read it.

I've not read any of your other work, I think I will enjoy it.

arthur
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england
4 posted 2002-06-10 05:33 AM


father /daughter
so sad it didnt work for you
arthur

Severn
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5 posted 2002-06-10 06:13 PM


Neala hon...I can relate to this, I really can..

K

kinson
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somewhere between here and there
6 posted 2002-06-10 07:10 PM


remember that you have people in your life who love you very much, who wont ever leave you, even if they dont like your taste in music
Neala
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7 posted 2002-06-11 03:01 PM


Matt, wranx, arthur,
and Severn I am glad you guys liked it.
Chris I believe you left.
-Neala

[This message has been edited by Neala (06-11-2002 03:03 PM).]

MidnightSon
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between the gutter & the stars
8 posted 2002-06-12 02:13 AM


they are good questions that i too have asked.
an emotional write. i hope the writing helps.

"The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite."

Songbird
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9 posted 2002-06-12 06:59 PM


Father's day can be a really tought time of the year when a father has not been all we feel he should have been.. as we mature we usually fine.. whatever happened had nothing to do with us as children but the parents had their own problems and past pains. Writing is good therapy, it can save our sanity.  Good writing, thanks for posting.
Neala
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10 posted 2002-06-13 07:10 PM


Thanks everyone for replying it means a lot.
-neala

Gemini
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11 posted 2002-06-13 10:09 PM


Very tender write, I'm sorry your dad was not what he was supposed to be for you, I think that it was truely a loss for him as well, because he obviously has a very talented daughter.  Hugs.
Neala
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12 posted 2002-06-14 07:52 PM


Gemini thanks that is really nice to here on such a subject thanks.
-Neala

blakloks
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13 posted 2002-06-16 10:03 AM


so sorry for you ~hugs~ but great poem pple can relate to
Neala
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14 posted 2002-06-16 12:33 PM


Thanks..glad you enjoyed.
-Neala

bsquirrel
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15 posted 2002-06-20 09:48 PM


A beautifully angry longing and absence.... I really enjoyed this.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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