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powerofthysword
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0 posted 2002-06-06 08:21 PM


Decomposing bodies - brutally disembowled
hang from meat hooks - dangling lifelessly
sacrificial lambs will appease the master
bring me one step closer to my dark destiny

Blood that drips from the butchered carcasses
is forming a puddle in the shape of a pentagram
a horrific silhouette - the spectre of hatred
starts to rise from the crimson apparition

Evil spirits of the underworld
I have summoned unto thee
deliver me to the gates of Hades
where I will spend eternity

The power I have now harnessed
is from the blackest of all sorcery
now having reached far beyond
the very realms of our worldly reality
In a hypnotic subconscious trance
I am being viciously demonized
from unprecedented communication
with the one immortal deity

I behold the bloodred eyes of the demon
here to claim the master's rightful property
succumbing to the power - death becomes me
I now relinquish my soul to burn in Hell

Staring into the sun just makes you blind to what beauty actually exists in the sky.

© Copyright 2002 Paul V. Campos - All Rights Reserved
kinson
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1 posted 2002-06-06 09:29 PM


somewhat well written, the best thing iv heard about hell, i hope they keep it on the site, it seems that they dont like stuff of this nature, but im up for artistic impression, fight on, push the envelope
kinson
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2 posted 2002-06-06 09:32 PM


And i would like the moderators to know that i was not offended and can appreciate powerofthysword's poem
powerofthysword
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3 posted 2002-06-06 09:50 PM


Thanx a lot kinson, but I don't understand
why they would not keep this on the Dark
Poetry section, I purposely posted it here
because it is a truly dark poem. I am not
a Satanist of any sorts, I just, as you said,
expressed my aristic impression to write a
poem about a subject. I understand some
people might get offended by this, that is
why I entered it on the Dark Poetry page, I
hope they keep it on here. Paul

Staring into the sun just makes you blind to what beauty actually exists in the sky.

kinson
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4 posted 2002-06-06 10:43 PM


i had a friend who got her poem suspended because she mentioned being in a pool of blood
powerofthysword
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5 posted 2002-06-06 11:09 PM


Well, all I can do is wait and see what they
are gonna do, I will abide by any rules they
deem necessary in order to keep on posting
on this excellent web site. Maybe, if nothing
else, I can just post poems like this in the
adult section. Thanx again.

Staring into the sun just makes you blind to what beauty actually exists in the sky.

EarthenSoul
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since 2002-05-30
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6 posted 2002-06-07 12:51 PM


This poem is artistic and imaginative.
Could easily be a scene in Stephen King or Dean Koontz novel.

powerofthysword
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since 2002-05-22
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7 posted 2002-06-07 12:59 PM


Wow, thanx for your support EarthenSoul, I
feel the same way. I feel poetry should be
treated in the same artistic and creative
viewpoints, despite the deepness of the
subject matter, whether inspirational or
toward the dark side of life.

Staring into the sun just makes you blind to what beauty actually exists in the sky.

Severn
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8 posted 2002-06-10 09:33 PM


Hey there

Having read your discussion, and concerns, I thought I should mention a few things..

Firstly..for Kinson and Sword, a quote from passion's guidelines, which provides an guide for why some things are removed and some aren't:

"The BIG Rules

* A personal attack against another individual, no matter how warranted or justified, is unacceptable

* Profanity is unacceptable (and disguising it with asterisks won't make it any more acceptable)

* Sensationalistic sex and violence is unacceptable

* Advocating harm to a human being (including self-harm) is unacceptable

Note: Sex, death, violence, and even suicide can all be explored in responsible ways and that kind of exploration is encouraged. Please use your best judgement, but be willing to accept the final judgement of the Moderators"

(And the URL for a full review of the guidelines:
/pip/guidelines/rules.html)

Kinson, I believe this is the poem you are referring to:
/pip/Forum46/HTML/001740.html

which was reopened after discussion in the moderator's forum. The reason it was put in for review in the first place is not because the poem featured a pool of blood, but because we were concerned the piece advocated self-harm.

Sword - I believe your poem falls into this category 'Sex, death, violence, and even suicide can all be explored in responsible ways and that kind of exploration is encouraged.' Although the subject matter will offend some, it doesn't seem to break any of the above guidelines. It is dark in nature - and while some of your descriptions such as 'brutal disembowellment' might be pushing it in terms of sensationalist violence, over all I think this is an artistic exploration in a poetic form.

Please keep in mind that the moderators take their concerns to the moderator's forums and discuss them. We make our decisions with the guidelines in mind, and the decisions are never made carelessly.

I hope this has helped clear things up.

Severn


kinson
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9 posted 2002-06-11 08:51 AM


Thanks, much clearer
bsquirrel
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10 posted 2002-06-24 01:22 AM


Reminds me of listening to Cannibal Corpse (a looong time ago) -- a brutal front for something actually harmless, and sorta laughable for its sensationalistic convictions.

That said, I enjoyed this in a very strange way. Though I shall throw no devil signs in appreciation.



mikey

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

powerofthysword
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since 2002-05-22
Posts 116
Glendale, AZ USA
11 posted 2002-06-25 08:28 PM


Thanx bsquirrel, I am a death metal maniac
myself, Cannibal Corpse kicks ass and I have
seen them in concert 4 times. I also like
Deicide, Insatanity, Goatwhore, Angel Corpse
and Cryptopsy to name a few. Thanx for your
cool words.

Staring into the sun just makes you blind to what beauty actually exists in the sky.

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