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senorita
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since 2002-05-30
Posts 2


0 posted 2002-05-30 10:09 PM


I miss you already, so I cry
No, you can't leave me
Without you I'll die

You're here now
But I know you'll go soon
I can't live without you, I don't know how

So I cherish every moment with you
And tell myself you won't go
So I don't feel blue

I don't think I can go on without you
When you do leave
I won't know what to do

Cry for days and nights
Wish on stars for you to come back
Sit alone in the dark, turn off all the lights

I feel like your already gone
I need to be with you, mi amor
I want to be trough with life, done


© Copyright 2002 carmen - All Rights Reserved
Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2002-06-01 12:41 PM


It wasn't until I got to the closing line that I got an understanding, and appreciation for this one. I do like your adherence to the style of this poem. A very good write!
Encarta
Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 101
My homeland is not of the world
2 posted 2002-06-01 02:02 PM


Great poem.  so full of emotions.  I look forward to reading more   BTW, I saw that you just got here on the two days ago, and I just want to say Welcome
Enchantress
Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
3 posted 2002-06-01 02:10 PM


Very nicely penned first post.
Welcome to Passions!
I'm sure you will love it here.
I look forward to seeing more of your writing.
~Hugs, Nancy~

darkstar
Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA
4 posted 2002-06-02 12:00 PM


Aww...that's so sad. I liked it. It was a good first post. I kinda would like to know the story behind it. Hope to hear more from you.

*darkstar*

arthur
Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678
england
5 posted 2002-06-03 09:17 AM


welcome
liked it
more please
arthur

blakloks
Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 60

6 posted 2002-06-05 08:44 AM


this is a great poem...and realli sad...~hugs~ blakloks
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