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Dark Kisses
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since 2001-06-24
Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

0 posted 2002-05-01 07:54 PM



In the world of misery and tears
Creates a sadness within our peers
Moving slowly with each new day
Fighting for each breath as we pray
Not wanting to open our eyes
Looking down as other's cry
Struggling for a sense of being
Hitting rock bottom without  even seeing
Feeling no love within our souls
Our hearts are black and small like coal
Waiting for a start of a new day
But when it comes, we look away
Not knowing which way to turn
But your heart is still to yearn
For that never ending love
Red roses and turtle doves
Knowing that you are there
Standing beside me cause you care
Feeling the gentle kisses you give
Ever happiness we shall live
The caress of your hands on me
Let's my emotions free to be
Together we become one
The fight of misery we have won
So dry your glistening tears
No more days shall you fear
For I am here to protect your heart
Never again shall we be apart

A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness.

© Copyright 2002 Mags - All Rights Reserved
Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2002-05-03 01:50 AM


I started this reading fearful of your continual crying analogy as a rutt - or jewel in the rough - that you were so difficultly unable to overcome, and yet the ending so surprised me after reading and responding to your previous writings, that I had to commend you and say, "Well Done!".
This was great, not only in its words, and poignancy, but also in an awesome transition within itself...Congrats! Excellent piece!
Oh yeah, please get teary-eyed all you need... without fear of it being in vain, wasted, or demeaning...but, when a piece of your heart is conveyed as this poem does magnamiously, even amidst those tears "no one will ever see", SMILE!!!

[This message has been edited by Purity (05-03-2002 01:54 AM).]

coyote
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since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077

2 posted 2002-05-04 06:32 PM


a very effective opening of the window to one's soul
well done

coyote

bsquirrel
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Posts 7855

3 posted 2002-05-09 09:27 PM


I like how the love of another helps quiet your confusion. That's love for yeh.
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