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Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

0 posted 2002-04-15 12:49 PM



Disparity awaits you, o' child.
Shall your desperate attempts be in vain?
Seeking not salvation from your inward exasperations,
Nonetheless you will find no growth in self pity.
Strength comes not from acceptance,
But merely separation:
A drenching of the conscience in lack of concern.
Adages of lemonade,
You can retain the magic in your being
That society shall attempt
To educate out of you...
...Welcome to the world

© Copyright 2002 Carrigan Chantz - All Rights Reserved
EveGnosis
Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
1 posted 2002-04-21 04:07 AM


actually had to pull out the dictionary for this one. clever word, disparity, and totally different but ironically similar to dispair. here's to hoping for the magic to not be dispared or dispaired. cynical, indeed, but a good write.
wranx
Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
2 posted 2002-07-05 11:47 PM


I've been going through your work (hope you don't mind) It's not like your underwear drawer or anything...or maybe it is.
anyway, I like the feel, content and context of your poetry.
in short - I see things your way.

~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do...provided it's done in private and you wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

brian sites
Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475
usa
3 posted 2002-07-06 04:00 AM


the last four lines
of your poem
should be taught
in school.
Looks like somebody's
future signature to me.
Bravo!
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

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