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Purity
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since 2001-11-20
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0 posted 2002-03-19 09:37 PM


For once, I the king of using all kinds of big words to say nothing in such poetic fashion, don't know what I actually am not going to say.
I am speechless...I am dreamless... I am hopeless.
I traveled this life of thirty three years under the false belief that as long as I loved, and as long as I showed the traits that mattered... trust, honesty, faith, hope and the aforementioned farce,
that all would be good.
Unfortunately, everyone came to know that nothing
that I had to say, and came to know how to translate nothing into a believable game of sucker the shmuck.
I am starting to see that it is no longer worth the tears, the pain and torment, as others see it as a good time with  many rewards at my expense.
But hey...why not let the pure of heart use his stupidity deemed insight, his compassion deemed advantage, and his loved deemed a means of acquisition? After all...
If he is that naive as to believe that these things are held in high regard by anyone or thing other than the worthless prayer that is within him, then milk that blood, right?
I have seen the days, although few and short, where, when new to someone else, these feelings are there; however, after the materialistic realities of life show their evil yet enticing heads, cast these new feelings out! No one wants to be seen by others as the pansy shown by yours truly eveeryday, when thorns from a rose get attention much quicker.
Love no longer exists. Complacency, yes, even nostalgia and feelings of false affections for self reward, but love? Love has to be discovered a second time. It's where it all began, and it's the only thing that will open the doors of Heaven when we knock.
Reading just between the lines of all this saying nothing, when there's no one there to be macho to, no one there that you have to show feelings aren't important, maybe no one there to care anymore..
maybe at that moment some will actually be impressed by the nothing I speak of...

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EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
1 posted 2002-03-19 11:28 PM


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it would appear that there would be no need to read between the lines, as each word does what it is supposed to to convey. this, as a piece of writing, is undenyably great, but as a synopsis of your state of where, i cry. if love must be rediscovered, then perhaps you'd chance the discovery? i don't know if this is acceptible or apropo', as a response on a message forum, but my response would be to ask for an opportunity openly and publicly to change this train of thought, hoping it would last a lifetime. spend the chance with me?

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