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Dark Poetry #3

The Abyss

Encarta
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 101
My homeland is not of the world

0 posted 2002-02-28 03:34 PM

The Abyss
Lord, help me get through this
My life has trapped me inside the abyss
My love brought me to this end
Please, a hand is all I need you to lend

Help pull me out of this mess
My love for her I did confess
Her love for me does not exist
So I've been cast into the abyss

Lord, please show me the door
Lord, help me through this, like you did before
Lord, you've always been my friend
But, Lord, I'm afraid, here, my life will end

I know, it could be better, but it showed how I felt when I wrote it.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2002-02-28 11:59 PM

I think you got the feelings of hurt and desperation in the loss of love down very well, and conveyed the despondency of it with a lot of emotion.

~* Imagination is more important than knowledge *~

Einstein

Encarta
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 101
My homeland is not of the world

2 posted 2002-03-01 03:18 PM

Thanks. I enjoy posting my poems here. Help get more things off my chest.

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