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Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

0 posted 2002-01-20 09:12 PM



I wander aimlessly this earth,
in a state of continual gift horse for-grantedness.
Never able to answer simple with yes
the are you happys of each day,
but unsure of single factors that make it so.
Many things there are to curve my lips'
ends upward that seem less than appealing.
Mental awareness scratched beyond focus
with a solitary wanting...of a furtherance of exchange
of mutual commitment.
Is it improper to offer such importance to only one
facet of a perceived gemstone life?
Demeaning the stained glass beauty of offerings from others
wanting...only for me to make less
the significance of soul mate bliss.
Unfortunately, this magnanimous bliss is the one
gift horse that thus far prances a less intense stride.
Making this life a living hell on earth that,
however much I want...I cannot leave until I either
gain bliss or lose current prance, and die.


© Copyright 2002 Carrigan Chantz - All Rights Reserved
Ginners
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since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey
1 posted 2002-01-21 12:58 PM


Very Dark, Very Sad, Very Appropriate for Dark Passions, and a Very good write.  I hope you really aren't this sad, or at least not all the time "Keep on the sunny side always on the sunny side."  Well that was just un called for sorry, but you get the point.  Great write

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"-NIN
"There is no always forever"-The Cure
"Even the losers get lucky some times"-Tom Petty

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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
2 posted 2002-01-21 04:25 PM


dark, depress and down right deep poem. Keep it up.

Ronil (A mask for everyday. Imagine a life without them.)

Secret Whisper
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since 2001-01-25
Posts 298
Through the Looking Glass
3 posted 2002-01-21 07:27 PM


If I hear what you are saying correctly, you have things that could make you happy but you are missing that 'One' and so you are not. If I am right than I can truly understand the pain of that feeling. Don't fret though, and don't lose your prance, things change and so does your heart.

Quod me nutrit me destruit.
("What nourishes me also destroys me." - latin)


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