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carolinadreams
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0 posted 2002-01-18 02:54 AM



so many worries, yet so many set aside
so many times, such infantacide

claims of youth and tales of yore
as if they've been there before

such a singular way of
romacing a day

such spins

to just sit and wait
to wrap the rope

maybe just wait
and forget to hope

it's not you
can't be
not your fault
couldn't be

it's been spun a correct way
so no worries for you
today

J.L. Koehler



© Copyright 2002 J.L. Koehler - All Rights Reserved
mauddib
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1 posted 2002-01-18 04:12 AM


Having also written a poem titled Circles, I was curious to see this one
I was not disappointed.
Good use of subtle metaphor, I had to think and I like poems that do that.
Becarefull with that rope, there are so many other good uses for it
take care and God bless

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2 posted 2002-01-18 05:16 PM


A wonderful simple yet profound post my friend. I loved it. Very nicely done mate.   Keep it up, and God bless.

Sincerely,
Titus


"Shot to the heart,
and you're to blame...
Darling, you give love a bad name."
             - Bon Jovi

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Ginners
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3 posted 2002-01-18 11:12 PM


not my style of poetry, but good words and good ideas, i enjoyed it
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4 posted 2002-01-19 03:15 AM


a unique poem with a unique topic. Good job

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

Secret Whisper
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5 posted 2002-01-20 09:56 AM


I think metaphors are our way of dancing around the truth, and you do so wonderfully! Very interesting piece and well written. Kudos.

Quod me nutrit me destruit.
("What nourishes me also destroys me." - latin)


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