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Jeremiah Johnson
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0 posted 2002-01-14 02:35 PM



As I take my last breath
I watch my life flash before
My eye's And realize there were
Times i should have died.
But then you were there
To catch me when I fell
It was you who saved me from hell
And i owe all my thanks. My life
To you.
But then I'm still breathing so I guess
I'm not through.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2002-01-14 11:56 PM


Yes when we die we will be the first to know...James
Rosebud1229
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2 posted 2002-01-15 09:25 AM


Jeremiah, sometimes even though the heart keeps beating doesn't mean the rhythm is
to the right beat.

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3 posted 2002-01-15 01:37 PM


I liked the ending. Great job as usual my friend.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

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4 posted 2002-01-15 03:35 PM


Great job, wonderfully written

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Secret Whisper
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5 posted 2002-01-20 10:50 PM


wonderfully dark write. my thoughts are with you in those dark moments.

Quod me nutrit me destruit.
("What nourishes me also destroys me." - latin)


*Satan'sFallenAngel*
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6 posted 2002-01-21 01:07 AM


I haven't been to passions in a long time, so long that I have forgotten my Username and password so I had to make a new one.  But I am glad to see that not much has changed there are still wonderful works being written here every day.  And this is one of the many.  Great job my fellow poet!
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7 posted 2002-01-22 03:10 PM


Nice write here my friend. I enjoyed it.

Titus

The Sun Always Rises.

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