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xEmperorEmber
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0 posted 2002-01-13 01:41 PM


as tension rushes past the threshold
a final synapse between the borders of right and wrong
amplification pushes clarity for course of action
stimulation of the dormant patient for so long
ive been patient
ive collected my dues
i feel the pressure
i know what to do
a simple test hiding in the shadows
awaiting this precious moment of vulnerability
met with a simple need for basic vitality
no better time than now for instability
i cant suppress it this time
i feel it shift, i feel it slide
i wont hold back this time
this urge wont be denied
i feel your limitations press themselves upon me
your institutions, your buildings
opposition meeting this need to just be free
vast contemplation met with mass retaliation

© Copyright 2002 Jimi Hendrix - All Rights Reserved
mauddib
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1 posted 2002-01-13 10:03 PM


fantastic poem!
It flowed, it challenged,it succeeded in making me read and want to read to the end.
It had a familiar feel.
Mission accomplished!
thanks

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2 posted 2002-01-13 10:26 PM


GREAT POEM

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

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3 posted 2002-01-14 05:11 PM


"Great poem! Keep writing!"

Where is my letter? Don't make me get wild. Cuz I will... I'm a woman on the edge. *nods* Anywho, I really did like this poem a lot. I understood this one entirely so I'm all excited and junk. Like "Oooh it's my favorite!" Realization does that to you, you know? Little things become like giant... *thinks*... *thinks harder*... oh forget it. You know what I mean. I'll see you around sometime.

Love,
Me

The only thing that I fear is to die quietly.

Read between the lines.

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xEmperorEmber
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4 posted 2002-01-17 01:47 PM


Thank you guys.  I look foward to posting more if the minds who read it are open to the messege that my work brings, whatever that messege maybe for the individual who partakes. Thank you Jaime You are missed.
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