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Heart On The Line |
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Jeffrey E. Osborne Member
since 2001-11-01
Posts 160out there 
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Destroyed by my insecurity I hate to bite the hand that feeds me The pressure is killing me I keep taking things that I don't need See past the lies and look into my eyes Here's my intervention; I want your attention If you let me use you; how will I ever lose you? You're just a new version of a game I've played before I've lost the win so many times, I can't play this anymore This "fantasy" was made with love for you You've got to give it to me (No, you've got to listen to me...) You've got to give in to me (You've got to find a way to help me...) Destroyed by my inability to refuse to take the hand that feeds me The pressure is killing me I keep giving things that you don't need Turned on by you cuz' I've aroused you too I won't refuse it, cuz' I'm too scared to lose it Look at me! I'm perfect! Just don't scratch the surface I've covered all the angles and perfected the disguise Obscured the details with half the truth and embellished it with lies This "reality" was made with love to you You've got to give it to me (No, you've got to listen to me...) You've got to give in to me (You've got to find a way to help me...) because my heart is on the line... "people say I should learn some self-control, but I just want to exorcise my soul" |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow Jeffrey, this is writing, this is catharsis. I can’t even begin to describe where this hit me. Suffice to say, I understand much of this. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
I had to read this twice, but strangely I understand it all! Great work!!  LOVE ELMO |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Hiya, Jeffey. Its nice to see you in here. Of course, its nice to see you wherever it is I can find your writing. :-) I enjoyed this of course. I get this in more than the most obvious ways, yanno? Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since |
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Jeffrey E. Osborne Member
since 2001-11-01
Posts 160out there |
Tracey, Yes, this was very cathartic and a much needed write for me. I had been trying for some time to get these feelings out on paper, but my muse kept wandering off.  Glad you enjoyed  .qtpieelmo, I'm glad YOU understand it cuz I sure as heck dont! lol - just kidding! I'm very touched that people are "getting" what I'm saying with this poem because I know that it's probably open to different interpretations. Jenn, You came looking for me again? (blushing with a silly grin on my face ) I'm honored to be graced once again by your words, my fair temptress And I'm sure you do understand exactly where I am coming from! Interestingly, the one person who this was written for and who would "get" the most out of this poem has yet to comment. Hmmmmmmmmm.... lol- Jeff "people say I should learn some self-control, but I just want to exorcise my soul" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed the feelings...James |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"just dont scratch the surface," huh... i think whats under the surface may be worth a look... i find your laughter is sometimes a cover for the nervous rumbling in your soul....would like to get into that soul... this write seems a bit on the edge..something about what i say, and what i want you to hear...it seems.. a rebel on the outside, a pussycat on the inside... enjoyed the read jeff.... hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
this was just absolutely amazing! Im not even shur what else to say but wow... yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I'm impressed...James |
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smitty-j Member
since 2002-09-13
Posts 72Florida, USA |
I've just found this site and have looked at several other posts in search of something that grabbed me....I've found many that sounded good, just not my style. I was however impressed with yours. Loved it. J |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Jeffrey, I wanna hear this on the radio. .m. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
encore..I require more..seriously... Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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