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Alysia182
Junior Member
since 2001-06-22
Posts 19
CT

0 posted 2001-11-19 09:54 PM


It's been a while since I have posted anything, but here it goes...

I sit here on my floor,
Looking into my own eyes,
Watching crystal tears streak my face,
    Drip
       Drip
          Drip
I look at a picture of two,
Locker 410  in the background,
Ripped in half because of one's decison,
    Drip
       Drip
          Drip
I lay upon my bed,
Stairing at an orange hat,
Remembering memories; now gone
    Drip
       Drip
          Drip
I remember what a good feeling,
It is so be loved.
Now I have no one,
    Drip
       Drip
          Drip
I watch the crystal tears,
Fall from my face,
With no one to dry them,
    Drip
       Drip
          Drip


Some day, you will ache like I ache!  ~Hole

[This message has been edited by Alysia182 (edited 11-19-2001).]

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jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
1 posted 2001-11-20 09:35 AM


Very well done, Lizzy...good progression and flow. Couple minor errors --- "stairing"  should be "staring" and "It is so ("to" not "so") be loved, both typos.  Only mention it because you seem to want to know.

And your poems do not suck - You have much to
to be happy with in them - especially, as I said before, in the way you shed new light on a worn subject.

jwesley

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