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LTEvans
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since 2002-12-06
Posts 72
Lenham, England

0 posted 2002-12-09 09:26 AM


I thought I would post something nice and tacky. Strike it down if you will.

Liquid Depression

The feel of warm water,
The steam on the mirror,
Don’t start to falter,
Pick up the scissors.

The feel of cold metal,
The cloudy iron stain,
Don’t question mettle,
Water covers mainland pain.

The feel of warm enervation,
The cattle colour of water,
Don’t listen to agitation,
Feels better, well sort of.

[This message has been edited by LTEvans (12-09-2002 10:33 PM).]

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LADY_DEATH
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since 2002-11-29
Posts 105
Fl
1 posted 2002-12-09 11:13 AM


I really liked this sentiment from you.I have been manic depressive for years, even attempted a couple times.But now even though things aren't always good, i can now manage the bad without the medication


fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

2 posted 2002-12-10 12:22 PM


OKay, with pleasure.  This poem really stinks!  j/k

I think the poem is rather interesting, but difficult to follow.  I like your apparent play on words

Don’t question mettle

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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