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qtpieelmo
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0 posted 2001-11-11 08:57 PM


PLEASE!? (HE'S GONE)

Burning tears,
stream down my face.
Please let me leave,
this darkened place.
Why won't they stop?
When did they start?
Please help me heal,
my broken heart.
Please lift these tears,
from my swollen cheek.
Please help me stand,
my legs are too weak.
Please take this horrid,
taste from my tongue.
Please hold me here,
if I try to run.
Please take the sword,
from my chest.
Please understand,
that I tried my best.
Please let me get through,
the next couple of days.
Please take away,
this gloomy haze.
Please listen when I say,
I love you & don't want you to go.
Please embrace these words,
because it's the only truth I know!

"This mask of mine I wear so well, you may see a happy face, but please don't dwell!"


LOVE ELMO

[This message has been edited by qtpieelmo (edited 11-13-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-11-13 01:58 PM


awww hun...im so sorry to hear that this happened...it hurts i kno but time will heal your pain...::hugs::

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2001-11-13 02:48 PM


Hugs to you...you will make it through this and find the happiness you deserve...James
G. A. Webb
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3 posted 2001-11-13 03:11 PM


God, how many like these have I written. I won't say that "time heals" because I don't believe that to be true. But I will say that I liked this and can relate to it. Nice write.  

G

P.S. Nice pic. you are a "qtpie"!  

G

Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't


qtpieelmo
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4 posted 2001-11-13 04:18 PM


Thanx Everyone for the great replies!!--Yea it's been like 4 months now since we broke up, the hard part is we still talk & both want to work it out, but we live 4 hours apart & I'm a junior in college, stuck here, & that's the worst!!--Thanx G  , but I'll never believe your P.S. now matter how much I hear it--lol-- LOVE ELMO
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5 posted 2001-11-13 04:33 PM


Well, the truth is you are a cutie pie. And even through the sadness of begging please, I see a smile, even if you're down on your knees.
Right now you're singin the blues
soon you'll be back wearin dancin shoes....

came back to fix a typo...thought I saw a smile.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (edited 11-13-2001).]

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6 posted 2001-11-13 08:35 PM


it sounds to me like it could work out, if you both want it enough. I know the distance thing is hard, but it can work, believe me.  
qtpieelmo
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7 posted 2001-11-13 09:16 PM


Thanx you guys!!--Yea I'm hoping we can figure sumpthin out, we've been together for over 2 years now & more than half was long distant--The stress was too much, with me in school & him working so much--We both would of ended up hating each other, so in the end this is a good thing--lol--& hopefully soon we will be together again!!   LOVE ELMO
JT
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8 posted 2001-11-13 10:53 PM


I know the feelings really well too.  The only hope I can give you is to use the time apart to get deeper in touch with yourself. (reading your poetry, it sounds like you're already doing that quite a bit)  Good luck.

JT

qtpieelmo
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9 posted 2001-11-13 11:58 PM


Yea Thanx JT!!--I have written so much in these past months, it really does help--& I really am learning a lot, it feels kinda good, but I have my times where I want to be with him & stuff still!   LOVE ELMO
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10 posted 2001-11-14 05:01 AM


Such emotion that it pours out all over through the poem.

I most definately enjoyed reading this.  Sometimes you have a way with words that just hooks the reader.

Good cannot exist without evil.  Darkness I embrace.

qtpieelmo
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11 posted 2001-11-14 10:18 PM


Thanx Dark, I'm really glad you enjoyed reading this, that really makes my day!!!   LOVE ELMO
Jeremiah Johnson
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12 posted 2001-11-14 11:57 PM


this was really a wonderful poem. I loved it and i do hope things work out for you if you ever need someone to talk to you can email me. keep up the good work.

P.S you are cute wish i had you in my life

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


qtpieelmo
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13 posted 2001-11-15 08:26 AM


Thanx Jeremiah!!--It's nice to know people still care!! I love this place, it's one great big family!!   LOVE ELMO
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14 posted 2001-12-13 04:55 PM


Everything I've read so far from you are sad.
I hope you do find happiness
I too will wish that for you
Keep you head up, don't lose hope
Thanks for the read

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


qtpieelmo
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15 posted 2001-12-13 05:14 PM


Yea I know--Just what I'm feeling at the time, I have a few happy ones (most are on my website)--Afterall this is "Dark" Passions--lol-- ELMO

[This message has been edited by qtpieelmo (edited 12-13-2001).]

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16 posted 2001-12-13 05:19 PM


hmmmm....very good point  

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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17 posted 2001-12-13 09:18 PM


*shakes head at the post above*  

quite heartfelt...i think you express yourself wonderfully...i can see the beauty within your poems.

Hey...#25437
What!
You in there?
Yea, im in here.
ok

qtpieelmo
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18 posted 2001-12-13 09:27 PM


Awe, Thanx Al!!   ELMO
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19 posted 2001-12-21 05:31 PM


I just read this one, sorry I'm late, but I have to say, I really, really loved it. I have a thing for your work. It's so beautiful. Keep it up, and I'll try and email soon. Did those tests go well?

Sincerely,
Titus

"Pain Is Love"
           -JaRule

    

qtpieelmo
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20 posted 2001-12-21 06:01 PM


Thanx--Titus, It's never too late --Glad you enjoy reading my stuff!!--My exams went well, passed them all!!--Talk to ya soon!! ELMO

[This message has been edited by qtpieelmo (12-21-2001 06:03 PM).]

EagleOne
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21 posted 2001-12-22 03:01 AM


Keep writing, and try to keep the smile!

"Let me pierce the realm of glamour
So I know just what I am." ~ Van Morrison


fractal007
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22 posted 2001-12-22 06:24 AM


Hm..  Seems there's a lot of people dealing with crappy love lives here.  I hope you can get through this alright.  

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

qtpieelmo
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23 posted 2001-12-22 10:07 AM


Yea, thanx Eagle & fractal, Love just sux--lol!! ELMO
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