navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #3 » Ophelia
Dark Poetry #3
Post A Reply Post New Topic Ophelia Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Immortal Beloved
Junior Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 42
the carpathians

0 posted 2001-11-11 01:11 AM


Willow waters moving slow,
Just be glad it’s all over.
One last kiss to the faithful crow,
With a bouquet of yellow clover.

Ophelia,a blue mermaid out of water
Born with fins,grown old with timidity.
Puppet,the old man’s daughter
Drenched in false humility.

If you’re tired of what‘s grown old
You turn within yourself.
A madness five and ten-fold,
A last quick effort for self.

Do you now find precious identity
At the bottom of a chill May stream?
And do they value your virginity
Lost,but not taken at the end of the dream?

Reality is only that,a fragment of sleep.
You’re tired of all this, I know;
finding your answers in the water deep,
you end with a single note of woe.

Fere libenter homines id quod volunt credunt~Julius Caesar

© Copyright 2001 Immortal Beloved - All Rights Reserved
catalinamoon
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
1 posted 2001-11-12 08:33 PM


I found this quite deep, not simple at all.
Sandra

xShUgArHiGhx
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
2 posted 2001-11-13 01:54 PM


this had a lot of inner meaning to it that i just couldnt grasp but either way it was an amazing piece...nice job..

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Immortal Beloved
Junior Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 42
the carpathians
3 posted 2001-11-14 12:43 PM


Thanks guys,i do appreciate it  
and yes there is alot of internal stuff in this one,not just the traditional ophelia story,but anyway thanks

ammelida

Fere libenter homines id quod volunt credunt~Julius Caesar

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #3 » Ophelia

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary