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0 posted 2001-11-04 01:17 PM



DISTRUST

Lies shattered on the floor
A thousand,
twinkling points of light
Reminds me of sweet before,
of dainty painted delight
And all around,
orchids and roses,
are withering and dying
With oblivious remembrance,
of thy lovely palm
Indeed a sight,
for mournful eyes
Malignant despair beckons,-
I sigh,
a heartfelt wish
But nor you, nor I,
can turn the tide
Trust,
thy name be broken

From day came night,
and darkness bred
Of fall came winter,
and solitude's ahead


© Copyright 2001 Jay Hartson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-11-05 01:57 PM


Ooooo i enjoyed this one lots!!! Trust makes the world of difference in any sort of relationship..the minute that bond is broken there goes the whole thing...great poem!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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2 posted 2001-11-07 09:56 AM


yes, this is a great read....
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3 posted 2001-11-07 11:26 AM


"From day came night, and darkness bred..."  I love that!  Very well written, I love the style.

Due to circumstances beyond your control, you are master of your fate and captain of your soul.

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4 posted 2001-11-08 09:42 PM


This poem is very good.  Simply excellent!  I find myself reading it again  

We are born into this world alone, and we will die alone.  It is what we do between those times that matters.  This is where we leave our mark.

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