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Dark Poet
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0 posted 2001-11-02 12:50 PM


Closed Eyes
Copyright 2001
Written by James Edward Shields

Burning trees by an orgy of souls
Howling in a madness pure
Grave upon broken earth
A laughing skull peers
Behind an ivory mask
Drip silver and burn the gold
A demon sits looking down
Upon the fears of a mortal one
Sleepless screams await closed eyes...

We are born into this world alone, and we will die alone.  It is what we do between those times that matters.  This is where we leave our mark.  Our s

© Copyright 2001 James Edward Shields - All Rights Reserved
cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
1 posted 2001-11-02 03:40 AM


this is very very dark indeed..i LOVED the imgaery which you employed within this piece james. very somber and very hellish. i loved the lines:
"A laughing skull peers
Behind an ivory mask"
i think that those two stood out the most to me. a job very well done james. i enjoyed this very much, keep post, poet....

         

"......",said the wise mute.

alibaster
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In my own private hell...(PA).
2 posted 2001-11-02 07:13 AM


Once again, wonderful as always went well with my coffee this morning...
Until..ali

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul." (C)alibaster 1999-2001

"Sleep those little slices of death, how I loathe them." Edgar Allan

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3 posted 2001-11-02 11:48 AM


The imagery rocked!! great poem!!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Dark Poet
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4 posted 2001-11-02 12:49 PM


Thank you three for your comments.  I am finding time when I can to come by here to read or post.  So far so good.  Thanks again for your comments.

We are born into this world alone, and we will die alone.  It is what we do between those times that matters.  This is where we leave our mark.

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