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A Hard Freeze on a Mid September Night
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A Hard Freeze on a Mid September Night |
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JT Member
since 2001-09-28
Posts 69Arkansas, USA |
A HARD FREEZE ON A MID SEPTEMBER NIGHT I believed in fairy tales. I guess I believed in lies. I believed in hopelessness, 'cause I saw it in her eyes. She has a strong desire for her wants. I have a strong desire for my needs. She just keeps on chopping down while I keep on planting seeds. You say you're not happy, so leave if you must. Because the more you want your independence, the more I feel a lack of trust. You think it's just getting old. But I see it starting to rust. You said, 'always believe in love at first sight.' I do. I just call it lust. I tried to sing the songs. She tried to do the dances. She thought the first time should be a charm. I believed in second chances. I cried an ocean of tears. She cried a lake. She called it a darn good try. I call it a mistake. She calls it too hard to deal with. I call it the past. She says the future's to far away. I can see it coming fast. I thought the cup was half empty. That's no reason to throw away the cup. She thought I was blind because I had my eyes covered up. She tried to forfeit. I tried to finish the game. She never would admit she was wrong. I never would take the blame. She wanted to find something else. She just didn't know what. Now she calls herself free. I call her a slut. You say you're not happy. So leave if you must. Because the more you want your independence the more I feel a lack of trust. You think it's just getting old. But I see it starting to rust. You said always believe in love at first sight. I do. I just call it lust. [This message has been edited by JT (edited 10-29-2001).] |
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alibaster Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 299In my own private hell...(PA). |
All I can say is...... OHHHHH YESSSS , how true...this speaks volumes and the way you have written it is straight forward and right to the point!! Love it, yep.....some thing actually made ali read twice..hmm, wonders never cease!! Until..ali {alibaster} "There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul." (C)alibaster 1999-2001 |
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Immortal Beloved Junior Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 42the carpathians |
whoa....this was really good,perfect rhythm,just all around perfect. excellent work!! lida Fere libenter homines id quod volunt credunt~Julius Caesar |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You wrote some cold hard truths! I read so much saddness in your words, but there is something to be said for saying it like it is, and I hope you took some comfort in doing so. |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
All I can say is WOW!--I loved this--I might just print it out & put it on my wall--lol--I love how it flows so nicely & makes me want to bounce around--  LOVE ELMO |
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JT Member
since 2001-09-28
Posts 69Arkansas, USA |
Thanks for all your wonderful words of encouragement. It helps me know I'm on the right track. You're all great. JT |
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