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Poetof-the-night
Junior Member

since 2001-10-09

Posts 13

0 posted 2001-10-28 02:31 PM

I want to cry as I look into your
eyes...
You will never see me, for i am
the shadow never to be seen by your
eyes.
i wonder what it would be like to
hold you so tight, to erase all your
fright as I kissed you good night.
What a dream I hold tightly to against
my heart, yoour the last dream the last
hope.
I try to forget you, try my hardest, for
your like a dark angel delivering my fate.
But I can't let you go for I care for you
so...
Care for you so tht I know it'll always
be so..
Too bad I could never know you maybe
then you could make me let you go...

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

1 posted 2001-10-28 10:43 PM

Welcome to Passions! This is a wonderful start. It has a mystery of course, and keeps me wanting to read more.

I enjoyed!

Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-10-29 01:57 PM

Welcome! very nice first post. I will look for more

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

3 posted 2001-10-29 08:37 PM

I like this!

Welcome to DP! Hope to see more from you!

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

4 posted 2001-10-30 01:58 AM

I liked, welcome!

"Let me pierce the realm of glamour
So I know just what I am." ~ Van Morrison

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2001-10-30 12:18 PM

Such sadness we all feel. When is the good time coming, anyway?
Very good poem, thanks.
Sandra

Dee
Member Elite

since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

6 posted 2001-10-30 03:49 PM

i am the shadow never to be seen by your eyes.

I loved this line, it is so sad. I enjoyed the whole peice though.
Welcome to Passions, I hope in your stay here we get to see some of the other side of your poetry too.

Dee

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

7 posted 2001-10-31 11:28 PM

"your like a dark angel delivering my fate."

this is such a sad poem. i could feel the longing and wistfulness of this piece come out and grab me as i read it. you did a wonderful job of expressing your emotions. the ending was quite sad too- i hope things get better for you soon.

and:

Welcome to Passions!

i enjoyed this poem greatly, and am looking forward to more of your pieces of work

i hope you have a wonderful time reading and replying to some of the other poems we have here- and most of all, growing within these walls..

please check your email for a special greeting

~Cherish/Moderator

"......",said the wise mute.

Baroni
Member

since 2001-10-14

Posts 94
Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2001-11-01 12:17 PM

Well done. Excellent portrayal of the feelings and emotions. I quite thouroughly enjoyed it. Keep them coming!

Does the name pavlov ring a bell?

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2001-11-02 11:35 AM

WELCOME WELCOME WELCOME!!!!!!

So glad to have you join us here

This poem was very good...great first post!!! I cant wait to read more from you!! Keep em comin!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Rosebud1229
Senior Member

since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

10 posted 2001-11-02 01:09 PM

great first write here, welcome look forward to more, so much feeling.

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