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catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2001-10-22 08:37 PM


Steel bands of pain engulf my heart
God knows, it should not have to be
that our love time be cut so short
I've left behind a part of me.

It hurts more than you'll ever know
such brief respite from year of pain
to fly away, watch it all go
to question if your care was feigned.

I'm falling through a warp in time
I'm going backwards the wrong way
too far from you, and joy sublime
Oh how I wish I could have stayed.

If you had asked, said just one word
I'd never, ever leave your side
but those are things I've never heard
you hold your thoughts from me, inside.

I believe this is heaven to no one else but me, and I will defend it as long as I'm left here to linger in silence...Sara McLachlan

© Copyright 2001 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2001-10-22 09:40 PM


Hello old friend    A year already?  Surely not?  Time moves on, but sometimes hurts do not....  *hugs*  We'll struggle through together eh?  What else is there to do??  

Isis

*The greatest warrior is one that does not need to fight* ~Isis~



JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2001-10-23 03:42 AM


Good writing...James
cherish
Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
3 posted 2001-10-23 10:13 PM


"to question if your care was feigned."

that, i know, would be the death of me- trying to figure out which emotions and actions were truly felt and which were faked.....(((Big Cuddles))). its horrible feeling like you do, you did a great job of conveying your feelings in this poem catalinamoon.i really do hope things get better soon- hope the pain fades in time   thanks for sharing, poet.


         

"......",said the wise mute.

qtpieelmo
Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
4 posted 2001-10-24 02:58 PM


I really like this, I can relate, & know how much it hurts! LOVE ELMO  
The Lady of Shallot
Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818
USA
5 posted 2001-10-24 03:48 PM


oh, how well I know this pain you write of....how well.  

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

sunshinemist
Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595
Fl. sunshines early mist
6 posted 2001-10-24 06:46 PM


Very beautiful heartfelt write. Enjoyed your words.  

smiles ~Marie~
happiness is contentment of the heart

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
7 posted 2001-10-28 10:08 PM


Hi there my "OPEN" friend...haven't been in here in quite awhile (shame on me!) - nice to see your words gracing this forum as well as "open".
As always, I enjoyed.

jwesley

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