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silent whispers
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since 2001-07-07
Posts 40
Alaska

0 posted 2001-10-17 05:09 AM



alone once more
silent, dark, sweet
lace edged perhaps
but its paper lace
wet with night mist,
cobweb fog drifting
across painted fingertips-
smog green with a trace
of lilac fragrence
just enough to deflect
the drizzel inside
onto the window pane

Inside the light you lose its edges until pushed

© Copyright 2001 silent whispers - All Rights Reserved
Alan
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since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499
right next door
1 posted 2001-10-17 10:24 PM


i like this. I made the mistake of reading one line at a time but when you go with the flow ...you did good...
Immortal Beloved
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since 2001-10-17
Posts 42
the carpathians
2 posted 2001-10-18 01:23 PM


"lace edged perhaps
but its paper lace
wet with night mist,
cobweb fog drifting
across painted fingertips-
smog green with a trace
of lilac fragrence"

What lovely descriptions these are,they have a certain nostalgia to them,very unique,good work!!

ammelid

Fere libenter homines id quod volunt credunt~Julius Caesar

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
3 posted 2001-10-18 01:48 PM


how u described things the way u did was perfect...wonderful

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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