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Rebelious
Member

since 2001-05-27

Posts 57
Kansas, USA

0 posted 2001-10-15 08:36 AM

When Im all alone,
I think of this plauged life.
The woman that is my death,
her everyword a cut from a knife.

The lies and the deception,
was more than I could bare.
But soon she got to me,
and for my life I did not care.

In her heart I could see,
are firey inferno from hell,
and a little hint,
of an angel that fell.

My eyes blinded by temptation.
My heart fueled by lust.
screwed me over in the end,
for now love I do not trust.

Consider this MY poetic confesion,
of the one who took my heart away.
Hopefully im the only one,
who has had this horrid price to pay.

LadyPeach1
Member

since 2001-06-04

Posts 282

1 posted 2001-10-16 05:53 PM

Wow! That was a very good poem full of hurt and anger. Things will lighten up 4 u hopefully! Bye bye.
LadyPeach1

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

2 posted 2001-10-16 07:52 PM

I really like this! great writing!

smiles*

~Tier

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

3 posted 2001-10-16 10:49 PM

Wow, that's pretty heartfelt stuff.

Consider this MY poetic confesion,
of the one who took my heart away.
Hopefully im the only one,
who has had this horrid price to pay

You're not the only one to pay this price. I think most of us have at some time or another

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

4 posted 2001-10-17 07:21 AM

Good write and read. My favorite lines...
In her heart I could see,
                    are firey inferno from hell,
                    and a little hint,
                    of an angel that fell.

Though I think, unless I am mistaken that the "are"  should be "a"?
Good luck and no you are not the first and will never be the last....
Take this quote from me and I am a women...
"Women are the most cruel
spitefull creatures
to ever walk the earth!" -myself

Until...ali

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul." (C)alibaster 1999-2001

"Sleep those little slices of death, how I loathe them." Edgar Allan

Rebelious
Member

since 2001-05-27

Posts 57
Kansas, USA

5 posted 2001-10-17 10:45 AM

LoL, oops yeah it is suppose to be an A.... my bad, thanks for the reply's people. Ali, sometimes I do think that about woman.... But not all woman. Thank you for your reply.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

6 posted 2001-10-18 02:07 PM

This was strong stuff here hun..enjoyed it lots!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

7 posted 2001-10-20 09:37 PM

This is great & I know how much it sux to feel this way!! LOVE ELMO

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

8 posted 2001-10-20 10:50 PM

"My eyes blinded by temptation.
My heart fueled by lust.
screwed me over in the end,
for now love I do not trust"

wow dustin! there's a very powerful poem here *points to the top*. you expressed yourself very well buddy. i hope youre feeling better. love burns! thanks for sharing this piece-well done

see the glass crack like a flower opening

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

9 posted 2001-10-24 05:12 PM

Hi Rebelious,

---
> The lies and the deception,
> was more than I could bare.
---
> Hopefully im the only one,
> who has had this horrid price to pay
---

How do you know so much about what I feel?

Congratulations.
I liked it.

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