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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2001-10-11 05:27 PM

Don't you think that if I smiled at you today
I wouldn't need to be this angry?
I look on each day with the anticipation of you
And I suppose I get a little miffed
When your tone isn't always pleasant.
So pardon me for taking it so personally.
Thats they way I am
And when its all over, when the bed is made
I'll remember that you didn't mean it anyway.
Don't you think that I have my own anger?
It trips me every morning
And I spend the day fighting its intrusion.
What happens when mood takes over permanently?
There is the blink blink blink of a million messages singing
And I am one helpless spot of darkness they are all trying to lift.
Well I don't need a lift.
I just want to sink a little further
See what I can find down here in the crevices of madness.
Why can't I stay here?
I'm getting back in my damn box now.
Just try and stop me.

Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence.

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

1 posted 2001-10-11 06:21 PM

Very nice, as usually.

I don't know why but first two lines touched me:
"Don't you think that if I smiled at you today
I wouldn't need to be this angry? "

Congratulations.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

2 posted 2001-10-11 08:32 PM

you can go in that box. . . just don't forget that there are people on the outside. . .

well done. . . it's a need for us to be alone sometimes. . .

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Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

3 posted 2001-10-12 07:38 AM

See what I can find down here in the crevices of madness.
Why can't I stay here?
I'm getting back in my damn box now.
Just try and stop me.

You're words really touched me, but especially those last ones. I've felt like this before. Especially that defiant "just try and stop me"

Ginners
Member

since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

4 posted 2001-10-13 01:56 AM

i really liked this alot, especially the part about tripping every morning it was a really good way to get the point across, i wish i had thought of it.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2001-10-13 05:07 AM

"Just try and stop me."
I would say this finished it off nicely...James

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