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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Empty lines Empty lines on a piece of paper A pen full of ink A heart full of pain Can place a mind in a kink Mixed up messages Sent by mistake Can kill a dream It’s more than I can take Lost and no where to be found Walking in the pouring rain alone Not caring what happens now For you are alone and I am gone It won’t matter in the morning For I won’t be walking on this ground I have nothing to stay around for When morning breaks I won’t be found You have made it plain for me to read You have written it upon the wall No more pen to paper shall I do I will find myself a hole in which to fall It hasn’t been a good day The night just went to heck I wish now, well I won’t say I am just tired of my heart picking up the check © icyheart 09/21/01 |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the heart always pays too much. . . sad thoughts here my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I agree totally Sven...thanks for reading it alan |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Great piece Alan. Some great lines there: A pen full of ink a heart full of pain I'm just tired of my heart picking up the check Bad night huh? But good poetry  If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Wow--I hope better dayz are coming for you--Great piece here--  LOVE ELMO |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
more like a bad 3 months. thanks for reading it....since I posted this I added an extra stanza.. thank you Tracey thank you qtpieelmo |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Alan, this is just so sad..... I'm wishing you a happy heart....(((hugs))) |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
SEA...don't worry those pretty eyes of yours too much alan |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
So how does the extra stanza go? If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"I am just tired of my heart picking up the check" That is quite a line. I sure hope there is still a balance left in that account, because there will no doubt be another heart for you to 'spend' time with, and maybe your balance will double next time. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Tracey..since you asked... My life is empty of you A brand new view I shall live alone pretty soon I shall just be gone Midnitesun...I am not sure I want another check...think I'll pack my heart in ice..  |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I like that line A brand new view (Possibly a better view over the horizon) Pretty soon I shall just be gone Well, her loss. Just so long as you won't be gone from passions. Always enjoy listening to your pen If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
thank you Tracey....i like the way you think.. alan |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Very Sad... Good write |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hope you clean up the mess and find a new account...James |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Some great lines here.. but don't be so hard on yourself.. a better love will come along and until it does..enjoy those West Virginia mountains.. wish I were there. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Zinsser...thank you for reading and replying. JM...i closed the account..put the mess in the trash..just waiting on the man to pick it up... Songbird....thanks for the advice...i'll do just that... |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
A sad story you tell tonight, Alan. One can only hope that it gets better soon. Dee |
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