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---I’m So Sorry---
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
--- I'm So Sorry --- (Re-Post) You will never know me Until it’s far too late. Women you have never met, Have sealed your grisly fate. ~ I fought the inner voices. I’ve prayed they leave me be. But everywhere I look are lovers, Leaving only me. ~ When you held her hand, Then gave a warm embrace. My blood began to boil, My pulse began to race. ~ My eyes must be so vacant, Devoid of love or care. You know you are about to die. I see it in your stare. ~ I do not even know you, You’ve never done me wrong. But hurts of old have drained my heart. In a muzzle flash, you’re gone! ~ Thank you God, ‘twas but a dream, That same old awful one. I tell myself it’s over now, As I gaze down at the gun. ~ I wait I pray to God above That fate soon makes things right. I pray you never meet me On that awful summer night. No one ever listened themselves into trouble. [This message has been edited by The Lonely Stranger (edited 08-28-2001).] |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
That was a GREAT write, my friend! As I read it, I seemed to be so wrapped up in the story. The sadness over came me and I am left here to ponder your lovely write. Mags |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
I loved this--but it is such a sad story--I hope you find what u r looking for--  LOVE ELMO |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I can feel the sadness in this. I hope your dreams doesn't come true. Good writing alan |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I'm glad you re-posted this because I didn't see it the first time. Really enjoyed reading this. Tracey If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
WOW! That was a very sad poem, but wonderfully written! Great job. LadyPeach1  |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Great Job!!!! Thank You |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I have to admit the title drew me in cause I say the I'm Sorry phrase waaaay too often. I really like the way you portrayed this although it is very sad. Dawn |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
Oops ya got me reading this again!  I just love it! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wOW... "But everywhere I look are lovers, Leaving only me." that hit me home...and for the poem? it was great! if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry- |
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Hellseyes Member
since 2001-07-25
Posts 120Kansas, USA |
very true to the soul.../Drew/ |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
I feel sorry for someone who can't look at a human being and see them for whom they are. People who kill are selfish because they think of themselves only.They dont think of the person they killed and the loved ones they left behind.I read your poem and i understood what you said. If this is your soul talking you better go get some help. Because in my view it is a cold soul.Because it is limited in what it sees.It only sees YOU |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem. Since this was a re-post, I was not as careful when posing as I should have been. In my original posting, I specified that this poem was just an exercise in trying to get into a notorious mind. I picked David Berkowitz ..... then I tried to write as I imagined he might see things. I should have put that note in the re-posting. 'Twas just an exercise in poetry. Oh and between you and I ... If I encountered a true wacko ..... I'd avoid scolding him/her. But that's just me. No one ever listened themselves into trouble. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LonelyStranger~ An interesting write from you. (and then I read your reply) LOL @ ... '... If I encountered a true wacko ..... I'd avoid scolding him/her.' Nicely done ! The poem and the comeback !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Well I can certainly understand want Suzzanne must have been thinking and in light of so many people having died. Thats why I wasn't the least bit hurt or offended. No one ever listened themselves into trouble. |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
Wow... I dont think I 've ever read a poem here-or n e where for that matter with more emotion than that..this was so awsome I could almost feel your pain. wow... keep up the good work! ~britt~ |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
Wow... I dont think I 've ever read a poem here-or n e where for that matter with more emotion than that..this was so awsome I could almost feel your pain. wow... keep up the good work! ~brittt~ |
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