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Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

0 posted 2001-08-24 03:55 PM

When looking into your eyes
Makes me only want to see more
Let me see what's behind them
Hidden down beneath the core
Give me a little piece
Of your oh so gentle heart
I promise not to break it
Or tear it all apart
I'll keep it way down deep
In the silence of the night
Holding it next to mine
In the softened candle light
Just open up your soul
Let me take a step in
I shall never judge you
On your worldy sins
Just let me see what lies
Down beneath your heart
Tell me all your feelings
As our lips touch in the dark

The hardest thing to do is watch someone you love, love someone else!

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

1 posted 2001-08-24 05:24 PM

I loved it on first read.
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..."Give me a little piece
Of your oh so gentle heart"...
The "oh" seems perfect to me
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..."I shall never judge you"...
Sure?
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Congratulations.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

2 posted 2001-08-24 07:30 PM

Beautiful hon, hope he does let you in... he'd be stupid not to!!
Isis

*The greatest warrior is one that does not need to fight* ~Isis~

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

3 posted 2001-08-24 07:44 PM

This is so sweet--I only hope he sees this in you

LOVE ELMO

G. A. Webb
Member

since 2000-01-21

Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA

4 posted 2001-08-24 10:29 PM

And I concur with the rest, he'd have to be pretty blind not to see what you've got inside. Nice write!

Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't

Ginners
Member

since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

5 posted 2001-08-25 01:01 AM

this is so beautiful. and i hope everything works out, as long as he knows how you feel i am sure it will. some ppl just have very little faith in anyone so dont let it get you down.

tookabear
Junior Member

since 2000-07-24

Posts 28
Mansfield, TX USA

6 posted 2001-08-25 09:39 PM

This was a beautiful poem, so full of tender longing. Gaining the trust of someone you love is an exhilirating experience.... I wish you the best.

ramrog
Member

since 2001-08-22

Posts 50