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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2001-08-20 07:30 PM

Can't you see me pushing your hand away?
Your ears and mind are deaf to my unwillingness to be your innocent toy.
Perhaps the night has been too much in my favor,
Now that the stains don't come from the corners of my eyes anymore.
And the
slow cinch of insides creeps up like an ominious tightening fist
to slake the thirst of pain again.
Dream of me if you must, but I
am on the other side of the gate
Swinging
the key
Do you see it?
I took it away
but it has a magic of its own.
Now I'm seeing you standing on my side of the gate again,
Swinging that key
in a maddening hypnotic rhythm
making anger quiver from the corner of my soul.
You're not mocking me with it,
but there you are
Swinging it.
Why are you doing that?
I'm getting
Dizzy
Please stop making me love you
while I need to hate you.
Please
Stop
I don't want to hate you
and I don't need to love you.

JulieAnn
Senior Member

since 2000-06-12

Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!

1 posted 2001-08-20 08:27 PM

Wow, I got the chills when I read this...
so many women fell this way....
Love and hate, can sometimes be the same..
first you must have one or you can't have the other.....great post!

Julie :)

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2001-08-20 09:26 PM

"I don't want to hate you
and I don't need to love you."
Exactly...James

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-08-21 12:31 PM

quote:
I don't want to hate you
and I don't need to love you

then what??? what else is there???

this is the question that needs to be answered. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2001-08-21 05:22 PM

nicely written... I agree that the ending leaves us wondering if not that..what?

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

5 posted 2001-08-21 05:45 PM

Thanks for your responses everyone.

I have but one question. Why MUST that question be answered? Why couldn't the reader ponder that on their own? Sorry...I suppose one of my "poetic babies" are my endings to what I write. I try to leave them thinking or wondering.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2001-08-21 05:53 PM

one doesn't have to answer at all temptress... and I agree that is nice to leave the reader with something to ponder...
I guess in my particular case, I was looking for indifference... which I happen to think is truly the opposite of love... and wanted the poem to end..with just that..and in a way..a final closing...

great the way it reads... and perhaps I am a bit too literal today... looking for absolutes in a place where absolutes do not exist...

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

7 posted 2001-08-21 07:20 PM

In my opinion you don't need to answer anything! You've made your statement that is where it stands at present.
It's hard when you love them even though every fibre of your being tells you it's wrong..
Great stuff hon

Isis

*The greatest warrior is one that does not need to fight* ~Isis~

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

8 posted 2001-08-22 09:29 AM

Wow! I'm speechless, but I know exactly what u mean--great one LOVE ELMO

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