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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2001-08-20 05:20 AM


Too big to be never to move away
To stand is now too great of an effort,
Never to leave his size locks him to stay
And eats himself into obese comfort.

His heart barely pumping loving just food
Steel bars support his bulk that’s supreme,
Visitors see just his jovial mood,
All are gone when nightmares invades his dreams.

Freedom to move freedom to leave once more
Back to a childhood when he could run and play,
But he can’t even go out of his door
Just through the windows he looks at the Sun.

Food no longer fulfilled his longing call
To leave they had to remove all the wall.

Gloom


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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2001-08-21 05:34 PM


ah yes.... remember reading such a story...

captured darkly..and well told..
although...

the first line caused me pause...and after several reads..I still failed to make it work... just my opinion..

qtpieelmo
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2 posted 2001-08-22 09:16 AM


The 1st line confused me a lil too (too big to be, never to move away?) the rest was great though LOVE ELMO  
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