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paladin
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0 posted 2001-08-12 12:36 PM


Caught in the daylight
of a falling flare.
A black shape in the
shadows of the trees.
Frozen like a deer in
the head lights glare.
I swing up my gun,
sight picture,trigger squeeze.
Three rapid shots
hit his frail frame.
He spins like a rag doll
swirled by the wind.
Crumples to the ground
in the flare's dying flame.
If I had time to search him
what would I find.
Maybe a picture,a letter
or even his name.
Naw! I wont stop to
to take a look.
After all he's not human.
He's only a gook.

paladin

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Dark Kisses
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1 posted 2001-08-12 12:51 PM


Okay so bare with me, I am a Kansan! But I have always known a *Gook* to be a foreigner, is that correct?

The hardest thing to do is watch someone you love, love someone else!

paladin
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2 posted 2001-08-12 02:07 PM


Gook was one of the derogatory slang names used for The Vietnamese people.Especialy the Viet Cong.Other terms were slope,chink,charley ect.What did you think about the poem?

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3 posted 2001-08-12 02:24 PM


Excellent write here!  What a creative way to share war stories and how one might of felt as a soldier.  Are you writing from true life experience?  And if so, hats off to you for fighting for our freedom!  Thanks for the read, I enjoyed it.  
JamesMichael
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4 posted 2001-08-12 05:32 PM


Good expression of your experiences...James
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5 posted 2001-08-14 09:06 AM


Being a NZer I was just wondering if you could enlighten me: what did the Vietnamese war have to do with US Freedom??

Good poem, quite coldly written - I like that sense of detachment...oh and Gook can refer to any person of Asian descent I believe...

K

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6 posted 2001-08-14 02:05 PM


Okay I'm Back!!    Anyways, when I first read this, I was like    Just for the fact of killing another human being.  But after thinking about it for a while, I realized something. When you must fight for your safety, you do what you have to do to walk out of there. I am a Corrections Officer and *IF* I was put into danger I would do whatever I had to, to get out alive. Not too long ago I was attacked by a male inmate and I did what I had to do to *walk away*. ( I wish I could of done ALOT more but oh well  )
Your pattern was excellent, it flowed along quite nicely.  The subject is another matter but we do what we must to overcome memories.
Overall you write very bravely and with excellent skills.

Mags

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